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Kirk T Walker
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since 2000-01-13
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Liberty, MO

0 posted 2000-02-26 01:03 PM


Limerick No. 1
by Kirk T Walker  

I went to a friends house
Who owned a monkey,
But either he or his pet
Could not hit the toilet,
So man did his bathroom smell funky!


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Joanna T. Lopez
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 33
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1 posted 2000-02-26 01:19 PM


Helllloooo Kirk!

Who potty trained who? just wondering!  Personally, I would make sure I drained everything before visiting this friend at his casa!  This kind of john is tooo stinky for me!

See Ya!
Joanna T.

[This message has been edited by Joanna T. Lopez (edited 02-26-2000).]

Poertree
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since 1999-11-05
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2 posted 2000-02-26 02:03 PM


Here's another ..lol

At a party one year up in town,
I came outta the john with a frown,
I'll fix them I said,
Penned a note then which read
"Would men who can't aim please sit down!"

Kirk .. you've titled your poem "Limerick No 1" and as this is CA I'm bound to say that I don't think it quite fits E Lear's commonly used format.

Having said that, .. I'm no expert .. maybe someone who knows could comment ...

Philip

PS Why do I have the feeling I'm missing something?



[This message has been edited by Poertree (edited 02-26-2000).]

jbouder
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3 posted 2000-02-26 09:41 PM


Kirk:

First, thanks for the laugh.  But as Philip mentioned, this is CA and this is not in the common rhyme meter format of a limerick.

Limericks typically five lines rhyming AABBA written in anapestic meter (da-da-DUM/da-da-DUM/da-da-DUM).  Not all limericks are perfectly anapestic I've written one that went:

John O'Boyle was a pious young priest
Whose piety sharply decreased
When he met a fine lass
Tossed his robes in the grass
And regretted it not in the least.

The rollicking meter is very important to good limerick.  I like your subject and with just a little tweaking I think you could bring it closer to the common limerick format.

But even without the format being perfect this was good for a laugh. Thanks.

Jim

Kirk T Walker
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4 posted 2000-02-28 09:51 AM


Thanks for the comments.  I was wondering about the limerick format.  I haven't had any formal schooling on poetry.  I actually went by the dictionary definition which defines a limerick as a humorous ryhyme of five lines (it didn't get specific on the form, so neither did I).  It is very helpful to know the usual format.    
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