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warmhrt
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0 posted 2000-02-22 12:19 PM


Two friends of mine and I were discussing this subject and wondering why. This is a toungue-in-cheek piece, and not in my usual style.


Men stare at some, ignoring others,
A personal choice, I would suppose,
Objects of such curious fascination,
Do they wonder why it's so?

Just what is it that holds their gaze,
Magnetic, draws their touch,
Though in composition quite distasteful,
They still love them oh, so much.

Each one unique in it's own way,
In shape, or color, or size,
The origins so nurturing, yet,
They've long been eroticized.

In the few remaining tribes,
Where you see them always exposed,
There is no special interest shown,
A hint, do you suppose?


Kristine



 All that we see or seem - Is but a dream withina dream ~ Edgar Allan Poe


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jenni
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1 posted 2000-02-22 01:52 AM


kris--

LOL!  yeah, been wondering myself, too, what all the fuss is about, lol.  

cute piece, liked it!

jenni

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2 posted 2000-02-22 02:09 AM


thought-provoking piece of work...yes, what makes a person attractive to others so much so that they want to stare at him and admire??

i like the last stanza about no one showing interest in tribes.i thought that was an interesting issue to add upon your poem.

though in composition quite distasteful,
they still love them oh ,so much..

i don't understand these lines.can u expain them to me??thanks")

jbouder
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3 posted 2000-02-22 06:15 AM


Kris:

This is about cars, right?  

"Men stare at some, ignoring others,
A personal choice, I would suppose,
Objects of such curious fascination,
Do they wonder why it's so?"

No, we just accept it.  

"Just what is it that holds their gaze,
Magnetic, draws their touch,
Though in composition quite distasteful,
They still love them oh, so much."

We don't care and yes we do.

"Each one unique in it's own way,
In shape, or color, or size,
The origins so nurturing, yet,
They've long been eroticized."

I can understand cars being unique in shape, color and size but I don't know if I would describe Duryea's invention or Ford's assembly line as "nurturing".  

"In the few remaining tribes,
Where you see them always exposed,
There is no special interest shown,
A hint, do you suppose?"

Perhaps the cars in these tribes are not a well taken care of and, therefore, don't draw the eye like other cars.  Perhaps if these tribes would discover body shops they would rediscover that deep down, male appreciation of cars.  Maybe, exposed to sunlight the way they are, these cars become dulled and dried, maybe even begin to show signs of cracking.  Maybe most of the cars are older and are too big or give off offensive odors when you take them for a spin.

LOL.  Thanks for the read Kris.  I can sure appreciate those cars.  

Jim


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4 posted 2000-02-22 07:22 AM


lol to the poem Kris .. not your usual style maybe but fun all the same ...

LOL even more though to Jim's reply .. early mornings obviously bring out the comedian in you mi laddo .. and I tell ya something, there are Local Govt. offices in the UK where there is not a shadow of a doubt that all the guys would have thought this was about either cars, football or beer .....lol

Meanwhile just a few titbits (yuck sorry):

Men stare at some, ignoring others,
A personal choice, I would suppose,

>>> Guess it rather depends on the respective heights of the persons involved ie your points of view ..lol   .. there's such a thing as "in yer face" y'know    

Objects of such curious fascination,
Do they wonder why it's so?

>>> As Diana Ross says "Ain't no mountain high enough ain't no valley low enough"

Just what is it that holds their gaze,

>>> C'mon c'mon Kris ... ~disingenuous smile~

Magnetic, draws their touch,
Though in composition quite distasteful,

>>> taste nice actually

They still love them oh, so much.
>>> sweet orbs of comfort and desire  

Each one unique in it's own way,
In shape, or color, or size,

>>> yeah must be a nightmare for the Gossard  

The origins so nurturing, yet,

>>> and therein lies the answer and the first food .....

They've long been eroticized.

>>> yes incredible what photo touch up and a couple of ice cubes can do     

In the few remaining tribes,
Where you see them always exposed,
There is no special interest shown,
A hint, do you suppose?

>>> actually Kris I think it's more a reflection of the pitiful state that overfed, oversexed Western man has been reduced to ....... let me roam the Savannah any day ........  

Thanks ....lol

Philip

[This message has been edited by Poertree (edited 02-22-2000).]

jbouder
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5 posted 2000-02-22 07:36 AM


Philip:

You mean this isn't about cars?  

Jim

Poertree
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6 posted 2000-02-22 08:00 AM


Jim

You mean you work in a Local Govt. office?  

P

jbouder
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7 posted 2000-02-22 08:31 AM


Actually, construction & real estate development.  lol
warmhrt
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8 posted 2000-02-22 10:22 AM


Jenni,

I know you can relate....thanks for reading.
I always appreciate your comments. Glad I could give you a chuckle.  

kaile,

It'd be better to ask Jimbo or Philip...
Thanks for reading and commenting.

Jimteach and Philip,

ROFLMAO..........You two are two too much!!
Titillating responses, gentlemen. I've never laughed so much in the morning. I had a bit of difficulty with the titular aspect, but was able to form one that I deemed appropriate,        

What are you guys doing talking about your jobs on my thread?

Kris

 All that we see or seem - Is but a dream withina dream ~ Edgar Allan Poe


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9 posted 2000-02-22 10:55 AM


Hi Kris,

What a delightful subject to start my day off today   BTW, I knew all along it wasn't about cars or beer or anything mundane like that. Now I'm embarrassed, you nailed me.

I notice the time of your post. I suppose there might be something relevant in that but I politely won't go there.  

Thanks for a nice warmer upper today.


 Pete

What terms shall I find sufficiently simple in their sublimity --
sufficiently sublime in their simplicity --
for the mere enunciation of my theme?
Edgar Allan Poe



jbouder
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10 posted 2000-02-22 11:49 AM


Kris:

LOL.  I just figured out by "titillating" and "titular" you are making clever references to the car titles.  Every car has headlights too, you know.  It's good to know our thinking is abreast on this.  I know my critique wasn't very detailed ... maybe I'll return later and give it a hard nip and then, maybe, with a few more readings I will have a firm understanding of what you are really trying to say here.

Ta-ta

Jim

P.S.  Sorry for the rude discussion of vocations ... what do you do, btw?

warmhrt
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11 posted 2000-02-22 03:04 PM


Pete,

No need to be embarrassed, just one of those mysterious facts of life. Glad you thought it warming...
The time had nothing to do with it...I tried to post it earlier, but was having 'puter problems.


Jimteach,

I am literally laughing so hard that I can't think of any type of clever response...it may take a while....hahahahahahahahahahahah,
gasp,hahaha..............gasp,hehehehehehehe

I don't care what you two talk about on my or any thread...feel free, as long as it isn't about me. You know what I do, Jim....

 All that we see or seem - Is but a dream within a dream ~ Edgar Allan Poe



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12 posted 2000-02-22 05:39 PM


Kris, just to be sure you understand, I'm not embarrassed at being guilty, but that I am so transparent as to be discovered quite so easily.  


 Pete

What terms shall I find sufficiently simple in their sublimity --
sufficiently sublime in their simplicity --
for the mere enunciation of my theme?
Edgar Allan Poe



Shelley
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13 posted 2000-02-22 05:55 PM


This has to be one of the most interesting threads I've seen!   lol

Glad to know it's not just my friends and I that have sat around and discussed this topic.

warmhrt
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14 posted 2000-02-23 12:18 PM


Pete,

As I said before, don't feel the least bit embarrassed. Every man is "transparent", as you say, on this subject. That's why we women wonder why...what is the big (or little, or medium, or just right) deal? Jim and Philip (especially Philip) were equally transparent...Jim just tried to hide his transparency a bit, but it didn't work that way.

No need for any blushing men around here.


Shelley,

Glad you got a laugh out of it. All women talk about this, but we never get any answers...just "C'mon, Kris", like I'm supposed to be a psychic. LOL


Kristine< !signature-->

 All that we see or seem - Is but a dream within a dream ~ Edgar Allan Poe






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15 posted 2000-02-23 09:16 PM


Could it be they're just smothered by their charms..? Shame on me..
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16 posted 2000-02-24 12:22 PM


You take ordinary things and make them fun. The man from Oz and I are having fun too.  
warmhrt
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17 posted 2000-02-24 12:37 PM


Septsong,

Great big LOL!!!! I think it's more from being in mother's arms....


Cassie!!

Wonderful to hear from you. I'm so happy for you and John (tell him hello for me), and, please, keep in touch. Is he doing any writing? If he is, I know we'd all like to see him post on the forum again. Take care..
Oh, glad you liked this silly poem.

Kris

 All that we see or seem - Is but a dream within a dream ~ Edgar Allan Poe



Brad
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18 posted 2000-02-24 01:04 AM


Ummmmm, I'm a leg man myself. Can anyone explain to me what's wrong with me?


Brad

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19 posted 2000-02-24 02:54 AM


LOL  ..... where do ya want me to start Brad .....??

.....you're not English
you're male..
you know more than me ..
you're one of those moderator thingies..
you smoke ...
................  later ....

               

P

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20 posted 2000-02-24 12:55 PM


Brad:

Nothing is wrong with you, Brad ... except that you are a LIAR LIAR LIAR!!!   LOL.

Jim


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21 posted 2000-02-24 04:55 PM


There is little doubt that I will see this poem again...it is just too good not to be stolen and published in some men's mag.  Thanks for an absolutely delightful piece of work....do more, more, more.  Hardrock
Poertree
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22 posted 2000-02-24 05:12 PM


You think that's a fault!! Jim ?? are you really married  ?

P

Poertree
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23 posted 2000-07-07 05:11 PM


I just had to bring this back Kris .. hope you'll forgive me, but Elyse and Debbie really were gettin' outta control !! just wanted them to see the real thing ~grin~    

P

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24 posted 2000-07-07 05:41 PM


oh philip, you were right, seems dear Kris was spreading the sexual tension around the site long before i appeared.  oh well.  you and Jim are hilarious.  you guys should develop a vegas act.  id pay to see that  
luv Elyse

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25 posted 2000-07-08 08:38 AM


This was the first post (and thread) I've read after being away for a while - what a place to start!
This was a hoot, as was the discussion that followed.
The first thing that came to mind is: You think it's hard to figure out what *WE'RE* attracted to????? Ha! Let me remind you that Henry Kissinger was once voted the "sexiest amn alive"!

Another though... I read in a psychology text book that most people show a preference for people who look similar to the first person the had sex with. It kind of freaked me out, becuase it's VERY true in my case and I had never made the conection before.

-Jimtoo


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26 posted 2000-07-08 02:20 PM


Kris:

Loved reading your car poem again and I am glad the Philip pushed it up to the top.  It truly is a Wonder.    

Jim

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27 posted 2000-07-08 03:04 PM


"Wonder" !! ..... ~smirk~

Bravo ..jim  Bravo.... !!!!!  


Poertree
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28 posted 2000-07-08 03:05 PM


Elyse .... you couldn't afford us .. ~grin~


Poertree
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29 posted 2000-10-24 03:15 PM


Specially for Mia ........ lol
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30 posted 2000-10-24 04:21 PM


*grooooooooooan*

never wanna hear another disparaging comment from the wonder twins, Jim and Philip, again - capice ladies?  

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31 posted 2000-10-24 04:31 PM


Christopher:

Stop being such a boob!  This is one of Kris's most well-rounded poems and is well deserving of a second glance.  

Jim

P.S. Hope you enjoy the poem and the comments, Mia.

warmhrt
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32 posted 2000-10-25 01:26 PM


Thanks, Philip with one L...now I see what "cars" are. LOL I just got a new one with a 24 valve V-6, 17 in. tires, chrome wheels, and a spoiler with a tail-light in it. What do you suppose that means?

Jim,

Nice to make your aquaintance. I don't think I've met you till now, but after reading your comments, and the banter between you and Philip with one L, I know I would have remembered you if I had. I did enjoy. See ya around.
mia



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kid D
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33 posted 2000-10-25 02:36 PM


ok am glad for whoever pulled this thread up, and have to say thanks for the smiles, it was a great fun read    
jbouder
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34 posted 2000-10-25 04:50 PM


Mia:

quote:
LOL I just got a new one with a 24 valve V-6, 17 in. tires, chrome wheels, and a spoiler with a tail-light in it. What do you suppose that means?


As tempted as I am to do so, there is NO way I'm going to touch that one ... lol.  

I'm also pleased to make your aquaintance.  I've been in and out lately but will make the extra effort to be less of a stranger around here so Brad will start talking to me again.  

Anyway ... see ya.

Jim (with no "L" in the jbouder)

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