»
Archives
»
Critical Analysis #1
»
Take my Hand
| Critical Analysis #1 |
|
Take my Hand |
|
|
Joanna T. Lopez Junior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 33El Paso, Texas |
Take my hand. Hold it ever so close to your heart. Feel the warmth penetrate your flesh as my hand moistens with anticipation. Hold my hand to your face ever so gently and feel the subtle softness as it caresses the fullness of your lips. Allow the sweet embrace of my palms to cradle the rugged contour of the four o'clock shadow that engulfs your emaculate jaw line. Ever so delicately place you cheek upon my bosom, if you are to listen do it quietly, so that you are able to hear the ardent love that is all for you as I run my finger tips through the plush thickness of your jet black hair. Shh...listen, can you hear it? |
||
| © Copyright 2000 Joanna T. Lopez - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
Joanna, I'll be honest and say that I don't care for this type of poetry so much; I like a little more complexity in theme. That said, this works pretty well for me. Strong imagery with a quiet rhythm (what the hell does that mean?  ) that comes together really well at the end. 'Take my hand' is a very, very common motif in poetry but you've done it better than anybody I can think of.Brad |
||
|
Joanna T. Lopez Junior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 33El Paso, Texas |
Bonjour Brad, and how are you this fine morning? If tis not a fine morning for you, I'm sure tis for someone somewhere! Yes, I do know this type of piece is quite common and a bit personal, but I was feeling common & personal w/my other half on this particular evening. After submitting it, I had strong thoughts about deleteing it, oh! not cause it was bad! contrar, but it is more on the private side, all the same thank you for your kind display of words! By the way did you recieve the e-mail I sent? My partner in crime has not been cooperating with me very well lately, sometimes she refuses to submit sometimes she refuses to retrieve and boy has she been freezin up on me! I think she is undercontrol now, so if you did'nt recieve the e-mail I sent let me know k! Chow, Joanna T. |
||
|
Trevor Senior Member
since 1999-08-12
Posts 700Canada |
Very tender stuff!!!! |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
