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warmhrt
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0 posted 2000-01-26 08:12 PM


Just what is all this talk of quills and love,
Of Cupid, Shakespeare's Muse and golden geese?
Not one of those sparks inspiration of,
The words you write with practiced expertise.
Perceptions, insight, concepts all give rise,
To the emotion linked to your brainchild,
Born of your mind, and then immortalized,
Just a synaptic process, though self styled.
No quills, the words will flow from pencil tip,
Or Bic; no vellum needed, only scraps,
Of paper where you'll scrawl your workmanship,
The lure of words of yore - it's just a trap,
This magic feather tale should not be bought,
It takes but creativity and thought.


Now which sonnets are more fun to read, or more romantic in nature?  I vote for jerome's, jenni's, Philip's and Jim's.

warmhrt




[This message has been edited by warmhrt (edited 01-27-2000).]

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haze
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1 posted 2000-01-26 08:20 PM


well I don't know warmhrt...this is pretty wonderful stuff...

Sounds a bit like Buk doing a slam on Shakespere...KUDOS

jenni
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2 posted 2000-01-27 12:33 PM


a sonnet, without a single "thee" or "thou"?  have you learned NOTHING the past few days?  LOL     

just kidding, warmhrt, i like yours best of all.  good job!

jenni

jbouder
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3 posted 2000-01-27 06:16 AM


Grasshopper:

Technically speaking, no comment.  Congratulations.  

"Now which sonnets are more fun to read, or more romantic in nature?  I vote for jerome's jenni's, Philip's and Jim's?"

Are you kidding?  You had me swooning like a teenage girl at a Ricky Martin concert.    Seriously, this was just as fun to read.



 Jim

"If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther


Local Rebel
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4 posted 2000-01-27 09:42 AM


ROFL@jbouder swooning like a teenage girl...

warmhrt -- yep -- this is great satire.  good stuff

warmhrt
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5 posted 2000-01-27 09:48 AM


Haze,

Thanks for the "KUDOS";  I needed that.  

Also for your too kind comments.


Jenni,

I disagree with you, but thank you very much.


Jimteach,

NO comment technically?  Are you alright?  

Is your forehead warm?  Are you on

painkillers?      Well, I'm thrilled ... you

made my day.  

Thanks, teach.                            


LR,

From the master of (sensuous) poetry, this  

is like a sweet embrace.  Thanks, Rebel

warmhrt




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jbouder
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6 posted 2000-01-27 10:31 AM


WH:

You're not being graded on this.  No need for MLA format and double spaces.  

Jim

warmhrt
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7 posted 2000-01-27 12:19 PM


Whew ... I'm glad about that, cuz I forgot the bibliography.  Not quite sure how I'd cite the references.  
Poertree
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8 posted 2000-01-28 06:11 AM


WH

After this I'm becoming converted to wordshaman's view   it is a seriously good sonnet .. kudos indeed for making a poem with the word "Bic" in it sound romantic, but then can anything written in the King of English Verse form sound unromantic?  (why do I suddenly have the feeling i shouldn't have said that....lol)

Great poem wh

Philip

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9 posted 2000-01-28 09:25 AM


Warmhrt, this is great. A fitting finish to the recent series. I think it must be difficult to write such a satire, particularly since the preceeding sonnets were so intriguing, but you have done so with eloquence. My hat is off to you, my dear, and now my head is getting cold for lack of hair  


 Pete

What terms shall I find sufficiently simple in their sublimity --
sufficiently sublime in their simplicity --
for the mere enunciation of my theme?
Edgar Allan Poe



warmhrt
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10 posted 2000-01-28 09:26 AM


Philip,
Thank you kind sir,  but do you really think this has any form of romantic air about it at all?  Nay, I say.  That's why I voted for yours and the others.  Archaic language does have it's place, and a sonnet is one of them.  When it's a love sonnet, it only adds to the romance.  Not to say a sonnet can't be written in modern language; it can, but it depends on the subject matter.

Thanks again, Philip,
Kristine


There, I've stated, plainly, my opinion. Now where in the heck are WS and Brad?  And jerome ... hey, I'm on your side ... making an argument for ya here!


Pete,
Geez, you're making me blush!      I thank you very much indeed (now put your hat back on)!!

Kristine






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Poertree
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11 posted 2000-01-28 09:59 AM


Kristine

"Cupid" ..... "Muse"....."Magic"  ... "yore" ..."Shakespeare"..... "vellum" .. "love" .. not to mention "Bic"   .. a sonnet with words like that .. I don't care whether it's about the local sewage treatment works, it's still romantic ..  lol  

~smile~  Philip

warmhrt
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12 posted 2000-01-28 02:28 PM


C'mon Philip,  just give up, and say it straight out ...     
"y-o-u  w-e-r-e  r-i-g-h-t".

Kristine




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Poertree
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13 posted 2000-01-28 04:45 PM


I give up far too much these days.. so nope:

"I w-a-s r-i-g-h-t"         (and we can all do these winky things ..heh heh)

Philip


warmhrt
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14 posted 2000-01-29 11:19 AM


Philip,
Are you trying to goad me into another sonnet,  but with a totally repulsive theme?    I think not.  I feel I have already proved my point.  

Oh my,  I didn't realize others knew the secret of the Winkies!!  

You write it, Philip ...
Kristine

Poertree
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15 posted 2000-01-29 04:43 PM


Ok Ok Kristine I give up .. I've been feelin guilty all day ... you win "you were RIGHT I was wrong"   .. good enough?  

Philip

"..my problem is I'm just too nice ..."

warmhrt
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16 posted 2000-01-29 09:07 PM


Philip,
If it was sincere, then, yes, it was good enough.  Thank you, sir, for having the backbone to admit defeat.
Ahhhh ... sweet victory!

Kristine

Poertree
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17 posted 2000-01-30 03:17 PM


GRRRRRRRRRRRR ~gritted teeth~ yes it was sincere .. but don't push your luck Ms Kris .. I can easily retract    

... ruffled Philip

warmhrt
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18 posted 2000-01-30 10:51 PM


I'm sorry, Philip, I can't resist...
Are you upset, or are you just wearing one of those shirts like Prince (now known as a symbol) wears?

Kristine

Poertree
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19 posted 2000-01-31 06:25 AM


Ohhh soooo drole Kristine ...  

... nope it's one like wot Shakespeare used to wear so I'm in good company ....

Philip

PS Do you ever shut up? ..lol  

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Poertree
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20 posted 2000-09-24 03:03 PM


oops ......i forgot this one in the golden goose quill sequence, kris is so prolific i had trouble finding it    
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