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Passnot
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18


0 posted 2000-01-24 04:12 AM


Losing more than loss

Striking pain within my chambers
Nights follows with reinforced sorrows
I give no thought about tomorrows

When last visited grieve
Time giving to more hurt
With flowers upon the holy dirt

At last my trip is coming to an end
Halted by my souls dying passion
I try to give more to my eye’s vision

Looking back to steps long taken
Age gives only sight on the past
I deny my destiny’s end til the last

Hollow are forgotten wounds
Contained in my emotion’s memory
Caught upon the drift of life’s symmetry

Did my tears run dry of yesterday’s cry?
Balance turns the tides of tears
Loathing expectations and discerning glorious fears

9/12/99


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Wendy Flora
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since 2000-01-11
Posts 182
Virginia
1 posted 2000-01-24 06:13 PM


Beautifully tragic... you seem to have captured grief and sorrow. -wen

 "Well she wants to live her life,
then she thinks about her life...
Pulls her hair back as she screams,
I don't really want to live this life!"
-Train "Meet Virginia"

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