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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563
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yet beneath a veil of lingering blue, but with a lid on anger and grief, comes a needing to feel a turning of the page. she tries wearing her long hair up, buying sensuous burgundy lace, exotic fragrances, all to no avail, she is yet the same woman, inside and out. she drowns herself in her work, in seeking knowledge, reading, writing, and then reading more, she visits friends often, and is again finding joy in small things that once mattered. now, when she looks in the mirror, the same ole face is there, looking back, but, within, she can feel the turning of the page. warmhrt |
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Astraea Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 378California! Yeah! Okay, I'm done now |
Very nice. I can easily relate to this one to a point. Me like. ~Astraea "Sometimes stars can only be seen in darkness." "Sorrow's crown of sorrow is remembering happier things." |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
WH: Again, pushing the Pepcid AC aside (liked your word choices again).  I think I've mentioned beginning sentences with conjunctions before but I don't have any problems with it here. Beginning with "Yet" actually gives me the feel of sliding right into the thoughts of the "thinker". I like the sound of "Yet beneath a veil of lingering blue..." but I must admit I don't understand it. The subject of your poem is a common enough one: recognizing vanity for what it is and isolating those things that are of "real" importance to us. Your wording, I think, gave the subject a freshness that made its common theme interesting. Thanks again for the good read. You keep this up and I may have to write something in free-verse (I can't believe I just wrote that!) Jim "If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Well, unlike Jim, I don't expect to try writing free verse but I do enjoy yours. I'm not sure I see vanity so much as possible a woman who may have recently lost at love or maybe never had much luck at it. Now she's trying to reevaluate herself and maybe questioning her self esteem a little. She's probably middle aged or at least approaching it. Yeah, I can identify with this one. Also, I rather like beginning an occasional sentence with a conjunction. I do it and not just to make the meter come out right.  And keep it up, but I'm still not likely to capitulate and begin writing free verse. ~looks determined here~ Pete |
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Hawk183 Member
since 1999-12-24
Posts 130 |
This poem must definately be a transitional moment in this (I believe young) ladie's life. Certainly if she could find a bit of vanity, it would make things that much easier. It flows very nicely and the words are well chosen. "Yet beneath a lingering veil of blue..." is a great intro...you established for us very quickly that she had been very sad...and that she had also been very angry...I take it she was probably not left under the best circumstances? Good poem. |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Thank you, Astraea, glad you enjoyed. Jim, Pete, and Hawk, thanks to you, also, for taking the time to read and comment. Hawk got the same meaning from "lingering blue" that I meant for the phrase to have. Yes, the lady in the poem has lost a love, and discovers that it matters not what is on the outside, but only that which is within. A very common theme, I know, but I hope I put a little different spin on it. Thanks again, warmhrt |
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