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Marita Knows Best
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Marita Knows Best |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA 
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Marita is my agent Today she will tap those words on the back of my hand Sail them on tangerine breath Globes of orange flesh will cling to red nails Today she will use mother's knife Have you eaten dear? 105 A must Not an option To leave my coat on when she points to the scale is not an option either. Today she will try to trade a fragrance promo for a photo shoot I don't want the promo I don't want to be shot either Blue haired ladies at Macy's smell Worse Graham is the photographer In a Fifth Street loft of an Allentown tenement Graham will try to f--- me I hate Graham I hate Marita I hate oranges and the white scale The scale tells Marita everytime I do not eat The scale lies Today Marita will give me a handful of blue barbs Shower me Praise and Bait me into everything I don't want or need She will listen to the scale Admonish Drug and Placate with words exactly played to the tune Marita knows best haze [This message has been edited by haze (edited 12-24-1999).] |
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manalive325 Junior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 21 |
wow, your imagery always moves me. I ponder and think about your story and want to talk about the content much more than the mechanics of the poem. That means that meaning is reaching mind....a sign that your style and technique are working. |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Ditto! Reading this gave me images, but also filled me with questions. Interesting read, Haze, as usual. Well done. warmhrt |
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