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manalive325
Junior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 21


0 posted 1999-12-23 12:25 PM


LOVE LINGERS
By, Walter J. Sackett, 12/99


Beat it up, chase it away, carve scars into its soul,
Still, Love Lingers…

Betray the heart, lie to hide, manipulate cruel and cold,
Still, Love Lingers…

Steal away, cheat mind and body, withhold intimacy and passion,
Still, Love Lingers…

Love waits for a magic moment to work its power,
With grace and forgiveness in a healing shower.
If given a chance to heal all wounds,
Love envelopes, comforts and soothes.

Love just waits gently, even when hidden,
Forcing nothing, softly bidding.
Open heart to its subtle calling,
Fall again into its holding.

When in our madness, hate and anger,
We foolishly stomp Love's fire to cinders,
Love endures, nothing hinders.
When all else fails, Still Love Lingers.


© Copyright 1999 Walter J. Sackett - All Rights Reserved
Littlewings
Member
since 1999-09-19
Posts 62

1 posted 1999-12-23 07:16 PM


I love it because i get it.No flowery rhetoric.great poem
warmhrt
Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563

2 posted 1999-12-24 12:49 PM


I liked this very much, and it is oh, so very true, sadly. Do you have any idea when that magic moment will show up to show it's power? smile
This was good. The only thing I might change would be to put the first two lines of the last stanza earlier in the poem, so it ends on a gentler note. Nice work.

haze
Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528
Bethlehem, PA USA
3 posted 1999-12-24 11:05 AM


Second On Littlewings resp! EXCELLENT!
manalive325
Junior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 21

4 posted 1999-12-24 11:30 AM


thank you each for the read and feedback...

warmhrt: I agree that the last stanza begins sounding a little harsh....have to think about how to mellow a bit.

haze: nice to have your read

littlewings: yes, sometimes I just hit the core without dressing it up. You'll see some more imagery and mystery in some of my other work. Mostly my style is straight forward. Thanks

Misty_Skies
Junior Member
since 1999-12-13
Posts 17

5 posted 1999-12-26 12:04 PM


Manalive,
  
      I liked this poem, but I will have to agree with warmhrt...Those lines are harsh, and they don't flow, but I loved everything else...Very nice...To the point, and true.

Misty

Fairy Colours
Member
since 1999-12-02
Posts 169
Sunrise,Fl,US
6 posted 1999-12-26 04:56 PM


Very sweet poem. But more important, very truthful.

 --A Little Fairy--

jamaicabradley
Junior Member
since 1999-11-04
Posts 39

7 posted 1999-12-27 12:31 PM


I really like this poem, I thought it flowed very nicely and read it about three times right away and really enjoyed it more and more each read.
hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
8 posted 1999-12-28 12:30 PM


I almost missed this, your first posting, by neglecting my duties here. I'm glad I didn't though. I like the format that you used with this piece. It's almost like reading two seperate poems. Like the first three stanzas don't belong with the last three, but yet they do...unusual, but effective. Interesting rhyme pattern you've chosen here by the way. Overall, I like it. I may change just a few minor things in it myself to make it flow a bit smoother, but all and all, well done.
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