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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA 
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We were eight Diamond studded girls Big hair Big attitude Divas in centrifugal fusion Kicking off the day the aches the shoes Laughing in time to worn INXS Wet Wiggling black vinyl troubadours on oak parquet Glittering borrowed lights DUI UFO's over the Walt Whitman Bridge We were Jersey Girls making it 80's style Making it bigger. ~haze |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash |
Ugh. This was a picture best left unpainted. Big hair and INXS. Man, to think I lived through that!  Still, your words evoke strong images. Why do I feel a sudden urge to dig up my Queen CD? Another nice one, Haze.  Jim "If I rest, I rust." - Martin Luther |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA |
LOL...thanks Jim... Queen huh... let me tell you Freddy Mercury is still a god!!!! And yes we survived and are better for it...maybe...anyway Thank you...this is part of a series...a lead to poems I can't post here. I posted them in the adult forum under "Built Like A Mack Truck" & "For Better Or Worse" Have a read if you like...I would be flattered...Critique is a must if you do... TA my friend...thanks again! |
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warmhrt Senior Member
since 1999-12-18
Posts 1563 |
Haze, Just listened to Hall and Oats the other day. this was good...the imagery excellent. It did, however, make me thankful that i've matured. warmhrt |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
Well, I'm glad the big hair is gone but I still enjoy the INXS on occasion (brings back memories of a certain drunken trip to New York). I'm not sure what you mean by the last line of the poem -- it just sort of seems 'there' if you know what I mean. Still, a very good poem about a time when I had long hair too. Actually, it was a time when I had hair.Brad |
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haze Senior Member
since 1999-11-03
Posts 528Bethlehem, PA USA |
Thank you much warmhrt...We are all thankful to have matured...Trust Me...Well some, maybe not (I do know a few) Brad...thank you first...second, the 80's were all about high fashion and high attitude, just being high without the 70's soul...(for us anyway) and being big, livin' large et al...I posted the rest of this series in the adult forum because of language and general content...have a go round if you like...you'll see...Thanks again... ~haze |
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manalive325 Junior Member
since 1999-12-15
Posts 21 |
haze, your gift is the ability to create an image in the reader's mind. You got me again with this one. Its fun and not necessarily nastalgic.....thanks |
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