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Eyes without breath

Aegis
Junior Member

since 1999-12-04

Posts 28

0 posted 1999-12-12 10:45 AM

Eyes without breath,
I gaze into you, with wonder,
and dread…
Eyes within death,
forever do you wander,
heavier than lead…
Things rust with time,
but without joy, without sadness,
your eyes gaze deep…
Eyes without breath,
eyes within death,
I gaze into you, with wonder,
forever do you wander,
and dread…
heavier than lead…
may you learn to cry,
my lifeless eyes.

Mya15
Junior Member

since 1999-07-19

Posts 16
Sunrise,Fl,33351

1 posted 1999-12-12 12:16 PM

I think that this is pretty good.
It has it's own kind of imamry that makes it sound good to me.

Aegis
Junior Member

since 1999-12-04

Posts 28

2 posted 1999-12-12 03:50 PM

Thanks so much, and what's an imamry?

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