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poetry_kills Senior Member
since 1999-12-04
Posts 549new orleans |
A poem a good friend of mine wrote, based on an actual experience... just wanted to know what you all thought... sincerely, **jerome the boy with no brain posting for "james-pa" she looked like an aging madame c r a c k e d china face dead rose petals for lips sad eyes she told me a story once with them a story of sadness of moral-ity a story with: no morals to it no endings no sequel s she laughed fixed me a drink vodka, no ice as i drank she s m i l e d or at least a futile attempt at it she said that i h a d bedroom eyes i asked her what that meant being naive for my age of 20 years she said that every time that she l o o k e d into my eyes that i seduced her and made her want to compromise all of her morals i said nothing finished my drink walked out never turned back to look at her cry all i hear are her sobs i wish that i could've caught her tears they were wasted on me... 10/16/99 |
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roxane Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 505us |
this is interesting, particularly the way that the words and letters are spaced out. people who do that astound me, because i lack the energy to do it myself. so, this poem is basically about a young man visiting an old woman who wants to sleep with him? but at the end, he leaves and hears her crying for him, which upests him greatly. i do like the topic, because it's something rarely touched on, the plight of the elderly. whether or not your friend had tthe intention of doing so, he or she ahs created a poem that mirrors the fate of the older generation. depression affects them more than any other age group, merely because they have none of those distractions that we, as younger people, do have. i really liked this poem. it made me think. thank your friend for letting you share it wiht us. |
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