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Critical Analysis #1

oh the love of lust

Iloveit
Senior Member

since 1999-09-02

Posts 1121
NM

0 posted 1999-11-23 03:09 PM

oh the love of lust and
the lust of love.
It does seem severely
over-rated to me,
she says with all sincerity,
and a smile curling her lips.
An infatuation here,
a new spark there
the land of cyber is rich
with variety for
all your shopping needs.
One to make you feel
special,
one to make you go mmmmm,
one who likes you
just the way you are
one who makes you aspire
to be better
one to make you strong
and one who can properly bring you to your knees,
and oh watch out,
in the games that you play,
for the special one
that you fish for
might just be the one
to get away.

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©1999 Iloveit

roxane
Senior Member

since 1999-09-02

Posts 505
us

1 posted 1999-11-23 09:24 PM

how dare you post such a post in such an illegible color. i myself had to highlight it to read it.

well now, on to the poem.
1)are the first couple of lines, the comparason of love and lust a quote? it seems maybe that way.
2) i think that this poem is about cyber romance? i'm probably too stupid to figure it out, but it doesn't seem too clear.
otherwise i think that it is a pretty good poem. it would be to your advantage to put it in a more visible color.

Brad
Member Ascendant

since 1999-08-20

Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea

2 posted 1999-11-24 02:04 AM

Iloveit,
Are you trying to make this hard to read? You've got to explain your thinking on this one when you have time.

Brad

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

3 posted 1999-11-24 05:35 PM

I'm lusting over this poem...it is very well written and I often find myself wondering are these feelings we are revealing based on lust or love. James

Willem
Member

since 1999-11-18

Posts 139
Inverness, FL, USA

4 posted 1999-11-29 10:04 PM

Iloveit, no I don't, but I do find it a
well-constructed piece of poetry on an
interesting subject. Not one to forward to my teenage grandchildren, though...:-)>

Willem

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