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A Fool's Perspiration (A Parody of my "A Fool's Aspiration")
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A Fool's Perspiration (A Parody of my "A Fool's Aspiration") |
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jbouder Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash 
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A fool to try to cloak B. O. with Sure! When even God cannot, my stench, contain. So when it seems your nose cannot endure Its best for you to flee than to remain. My sweaty hands,they cannot hold my pen, Foul odor billows forth to sting the eye, Small children cry and parents curse me when They see my most offensive self walk by. So please lament for me, beloved friend, For Love's sweet kiss won't bless this stinking brow, And weep for those my fetid feet offend Who think I've rolled in dung fresh from the cow. A reeking man, as rancid as can be, When this foul perspiration covers me. ------------------ Jim "If I rest, I rust." -Martin Luther |
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Jewl_24_1999 Member
since 1999-10-24
Posts 64USA |
jim very funny, i did like this one.! [This message has been edited by Jewl_24_1999 (edited 11-17-1999).] [This message has been edited by Jewl_24_1999 (edited 11-17-1999).] |
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roxane Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 505us |
i actually laughed out loud at this one. small children cry? you may want to see a specialist about that one.  |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
Geez Jim you're already parodying yourself. That can't be good.  You know what's missing though is a punchline. It was fun to read though (if that's the right word). |
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Willem Member
since 1999-11-18
Posts 139Inverness, FL, USA |
Jim: Very funny indeed, but not all the way. I happen to know one such person, a dear friend, who answers almost exactly to your description. Hope this proves you intuitive power. Willem |
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