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Lolita
Junior Member
since 1999-11-09
Posts 44
Buffalo, NY, America

0 posted 1999-11-15 09:26 AM


A slow, slurred rhumba beat
knocks it's rythm
against my feet
And pebbles slide, and
move away
Away on a ride, lasts
all day

Jamaica moves my naked hips
traces dreams
with fingertips
Just to make, me
call her name
Journey to take, my
pleasure and pain

It hurts when she parts
soft, eager lips
so good when she starts
Inching herself, deep
into me
Inside she'll keep
making me free

Slow dancing she shows me
just what I am
Jamaica my woman
Jamaica my man

© Copyright 1999 Lolita - All Rights Reserved
Poertree
Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359
UK
1 posted 1999-11-15 03:50 PM


WHEW..... and I thought I might be in the wrong forum with "Time Line" !! .... when I've calmed down I'll maybe think of something constructive to say
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