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Renee
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since 1999-11-07
Posts 18
langhorne, PA 19047

0 posted 1999-11-14 12:02 PM


Touch my hand
And share your warmth with me,
So that I may carry it
Wherever we may go.

Hold me close
And let me rest my head on your shoulders,
So that I may feel you
wherever we may go.

Rock me in your arms
And share your soul with me,
So that we can share a dance,
Wherever we may go.

Sing a little song
And share your voice with me,
So that I may hear you
wherever we may go.

Show me your sweet smile
And share your sense of humor,
So that we can share a laugh
wherever we may go.

Open up your heart
And share yourself with me,
So that we can carry the love we have
Wherever we may go.

Walk with me
And we will never walk alone
Because we will always have the love we carry, Wherever we may go.


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Linda Renee

[This message has been edited by Renee (edited 11-15-1999).]

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roxane
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since 1999-09-02
Posts 505
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1 posted 1999-11-14 12:36 PM


this is pretty good. the only part that i really didn't care for was the "so that i may smell you." for me, this seemed to upset the feeling of the poem, the sentimental thoughts displayed in it. the word "smell" seems a little crude in comparision to the rest of the poem. otherwise, i think it does a good job of displaying the love you have for this person.
Renee
Junior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 18
langhorne, PA 19047
2 posted 1999-11-15 09:26 PM


roxane,

Thank you for your response. I agree that the word "smell" does not exaclty flow with the rest of the poem. I think that "feel" is a little more appropriate.

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Linda Renee

[This message has been edited by Renee (edited 11-15-1999).]

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