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Critical Analysis #1

I have nothing here

Minterra
New Member

since 1999-10-28

Posts 8
Rochester, NY, United States

0 posted 1999-11-12 11:22 AM

I have nothing here;
My ties are broke.
All your strings
Shall no longer choke.
Your laws on me
Shall never bind.
Your guilty traps
I leave behind.
Do not follow me,
Where e'er I go.
The paths I cross
Aren't yours to know.
I am no longer
In your grasp,
Or chained in place
With silver clasp.
I am not yours,
Do you hear?
My ties are broke -
I have nothing here.

jamaicabradley
Junior Member

since 1999-11-04

Posts 39

1 posted 1999-11-12 01:59 PM

I really like this, my sentiment exactly. No, really great and to the point, no self loathing, I like it.

Brad
Member Ascendant

since 1999-08-20

Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea

2 posted 1999-11-18 05:31 AM

It took me a second to see how the poem works together and my advice is exactly the opposite of Jamaicabradley: there seems to be no self doubt, no wondering about the future, no realization that you were, at some level, tied to the person voluntarily. This is almost a position piece in terms of its one sidedness. This may just be me of course but that just doesn't quite reflect my experience.

But I could be wrong,
Brad

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