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The Edge of Night |
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Robin Junior Member
since 1999-08-07
Posts 48Cardiff, Wales, UK |
Robin Laffan 6/11/99 A scream pierces the suburban night Against the distant background hum Of the city’s sleep It echoes from an unseen room Or alleyway You hold your breath to listen for more As already the memory fades. Was it a scream or a cry Of laughter on a shared game Or was there a cry at all? And as you release the breath That has been straining in your lungs You hear it again On the edge of sight At the far side of here And still you cannot tell. A pause with the hushed swoop of a passing car Revving through the night to an unknown house Perhaps returning Perhaps going And in its wake the voices start. Half heard, half shouted A baying of laughter or a sob of fear At the edge of the night Who can tell? A slamming door, a child’s voice. The city lives on tonight. |
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Systematic Decay Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1301That place with padded walls and funny people in white......... |
Personally, I like this very much, i wouldn't change anything, that's my opinion.  ------------------ Thinking is just what a great many people think they are doing when they are merely rearranging their predjudices. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Robin this is excellent! I don't see anything with this that needs changing at all! I thoroughly enjoyed reading this! ------------------ Denise |
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