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Nightspear
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since 1999-10-20
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Michigan, USA

0 posted 1999-10-29 11:46 PM



She told me to imagine the soft rain
Falling upon my hair.
The rain which never changed her mood,
But always made me sad.
As I curl into her arms,
Which made me feel safe and warm,
I listened to the soft sound of falling rain.
It healed my once wounded heart,
The heart that had hurt for so long.



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Nighspear{~*~}


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Brad
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since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea
1 posted 1999-10-30 03:17 PM


Nightspear,
This is an interesting piece. I don't know the situation behind it but the reversal of stereotypes here is very intriguing. Of course, it could be a family member, a friend or even more than a friend but since the set up is distinctly romantic in nature, you have the male character (and I know I'm assuming a lot. What makes this interesting for me is that it is possible to see the speaker as male. It can go either way. ) :
'curl into her arms/which made me feel safe and warm' -- this is not something a male would say generally.

It's fairly easy to place the poem in a more traditional context but I like the ambiguity of this piece (and I never, never say that. )

Brad

hoot_owl_rn
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since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
2 posted 1999-10-30 06:38 PM


I liked this one, but since rain is one of my favorite things, I may be a bit biased
This line:
"The rain which never changed her mood,
But always made me sad."
says a few things more than the words read...I like the expression and to me it reads that what is comforting to one can be upseting to another. To follow that with the next two lines:
"As I curl into her arms,
Which made me feel safe and warm,"
brings that image home. I myself like what you said and even more what you implied here. Nicely written



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