Let me think of you purely...

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Critical Analysis #1

Let me think of you purely...

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 1999-10-20 10:53 PM

Let me think of you purely
Just the way I remember
In my dreams, gliding truly
Far from sorrow and grief
Leave the doubts for later
As for now, love me tender
Mix your soul with the vapor
And allow me to breathe

Once again I’m with you
On one page; in one phrase
From one point of view
We are reading our fate
Skimming letters for love
Which exists in one gaze
We don’t know what we have
That’s what makes it so great

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I fell in love and kept on falling

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

1 posted 1999-10-22 01:10 PM

Master......the flow of this one is good, you've got some great lines in here
"Mix your soul with the vapor
And allow me to breathe" and
"We don’t know what we have
That’s what makes it so great"

I find myself a bit confused in a few places on this one though...in the first part it almost sounds as though she is gone, then you come around to say, "once again I am with you." also, I wasn't exactly sure what to make of this
"On one page; in one phrase
From one point of view
We are reading our fate
Skimming letters for love
Which exists in one gaze"

This is just one of those poems that is much better read than analized. It's a pleasant read to the ears and tongue.

Master
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since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

2 posted 1999-10-22 04:05 PM

Well, she's isn't here with me, but she lives in my memory or imagination.

"On one page; in one phrase
From one point of view
We are reading our fate"

--In these lines, I'm trying to say that we grew up together and learned to look at life from the same prespective.

"Skimming letters for love
Which exists in one gaze
We don’t know what we have
That’s what makes it so great"

-- Sometimes people look for love in all the wrong places. Not realizing that you are in love and living is what makes the feeling so great.

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius

since 1999-07-05

Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA

3 posted 1999-10-22 05:08 PM

Okay, I buy that explanation

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

4 posted 1999-10-22 05:18 PM

I sold it well, didn't I?

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