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Redzippie
Junior Member
since 1999-10-19
Posts 16
Michigan

0 posted 1999-10-19 09:28 PM


You are there
And I am here
Sometimes I wish that you were near
To hear your voice
To see your smile
I must admit it's been awhile

I say prayers
For you each day
And hope God sends my love your way
Our memories
I keep at heart
And cherish them for what they are

I miss you
I knew I would
But I know things will work out good
Just keep the faith
In all you do
Take care babe and I love you

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~Christina

© Copyright 1999 Redzippie - All Rights Reserved
Iloveit
Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 1121
NM
1 posted 1999-10-20 12:33 PM


I like this, it is a simple I miss you poem, but very nice. It has an acceptance of the way things are, but a deep wishing that things could be different, and that I understand all too well
starchild
Member
since 1999-10-22
Posts 59
manchester, england
2 posted 1999-10-25 09:30 AM


This is Ruth... starchild, I don't believe this was an appropriate response to this poem. If you care to respond, respond to the work and please leave the valguarity out of it.

[This message has been edited by hoot_owl_rn (edited 10-25-1999).]

hoot_owl_rn
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
3 posted 1999-10-25 09:14 PM


Okay, this is simple, but aside from a few lines that could stand just a bit of polishing on the meter, it works.
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