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roxane Senior Member
since 1999-09-02
Posts 505us |
love- the horrible black shroud i wore for too long hoping to impress and be best-dressed with every profane movement of his vile unholy hand he gradually tattered the edges he didn't care when i said to stop because he would never have to wear it cast away with a thousand other failures the shroud found a home in my floor i thought of wearing it for a short while before giving in to neglect then i met you, yet i never thought to check upon its sorry sight but when i announced that i loved you i went home and saw it still laying there though within its dark stitches golden threads of your heart had been woven ever so delicately making love a beautiful thing i have some qualms for writing this, but i need to write some and get some inspiration in order to recover from some horrible writers block. |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
roxane, I thought the religious allusions at the beginning of the poem to be a bit unsettling (felt like the old hyperbole monster was rearing its ugly head) but the ending brings everyhing together. Very much enjoyed the second part of this poem. Thanks, Brad |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I must applaud this one, it's a fine piece. I love the symbolism of love being a shroud...nicely done! Ruth |
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