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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
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0 posted 1999-09-26 11:37 AM


You greet the problems
of the world with indifference.
Totally ingrossed in growing,
your elbows and knees are the brunt
of asphault's
bad jokes.

You believe
a bandage stops pain,
death to you is just
a mystery,
a catalyst for your questions,
the monsters of your dreams
are real.

"How did God make
the world?"
"If I bleed
will I die?"

Spindle legged boy
tripping over cracks
in the cement
with run-down sneakers
sun-drenched hair
the sea in your eyes.

Yes, I love you.
No, you will not
live forever.

© Copyright 1999 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
rachana.s
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since 1999-09-16
Posts 55
madras,tamil nadu,India
1 posted 1999-09-27 01:57 AM


good narrative and a lovely end. It made me sad, the finality in the ending. love and death - what two poles to put together. Very difficult to do. But you've done it.

rachi

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