Yourself (everyone please give me your honest opinion)

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Yourself (everyone please give me your honest opinion)

AliceInWonderLand
New Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 5
Philadelphia

0 posted 1999-09-23 02:23 AM

This Is a poem about my life, maybe some of you can relate to it.

Yourself

You hide your pain behind some good advice, and you
know everything you say is
      right, but you never let it sink into you,
         cause helping yourself is something you could never do.

And you sound so brave, and you take everything as it comes, and you never say die, even with fear in your eyes, all your
                   life you seem to just get by.
And I see you get restless,
and you say your just fine,
but you know you've been
hangin around
here for too long,
its funny how you can never admit to whats really wrong.

You hide your tears and replace your
sadness with a smile,
         you keep waiting for something better, and you've been waiting a

while.

And you always say
"everything is going to be alright" but you
fear those words will be

proven untrue,
and you never say the truth
      cause the truth may allow someone
to get close to you.

And your always the strong one,
      cause its always easier
to be strong for somebody else, just as long as
          you don't have to
      feel the pain,
just as long as you don't have to think about
                            yourself.

ninashore
New Member

since 1999-09-23

Posts 2
NJ

1 posted 1999-09-23 02:08 PM

excellent poem! I can definately relate to it. I only have one complaint... it's all broken up. is that what you intended to do? well, anyway, look forward to reading more of your posts!

roxane
Senior Member

since 1999-09-02

Posts 505
us

2 posted 1999-09-23 11:24 PM

this is a truly thoughtful poem and very well written. it flows nicely and i think that the brokenness of it contributes to its style.

Systematic Decay
Senior Member

since 1999-09-15

Posts 1301
That place with padded walls and funny people in white.........

3 posted 1999-09-24 12:10 PM

I really can relate to it....I've always been the helper, the strong one, the mediator, the-middle man (or girl i should say) I've always been so busy with other people I never had time to think about myself....and now I ahve all the time in the world to do so....
And I hate it

BTW: I loved the way the poem was broken up. It's unique, and adds style

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