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Critical Analysis #1

Suicidal Torture

Echo Rhayne
Senior Member

since 1999-09-17

Posts 1495
Canyon Country, CA

0 posted 1999-09-21 04:32 AM

Please give any suggestions or comments on this poem please. I would greatly appreciate it!

She stands still with her emotions ready to react in
a death-defining way,
Beneath the panic-stricken body, bits of the bloodthirsty
cliff break away from the sight.
Fear grasps a hold of her mind, over powering the strongest
of her will power, and death opens it's gateway,
It's gateway to agony, sweat pours down the crazed structure
as the hand of mortality reaches out to fight;
To fight to end the psychotic life of the innocent girl,
who has now taken it's hand.
She shuts her eyes and the angel of death thrusts her over
the edge.
She breathes her last breath, thinks her last thought, and
dives into the nothingness below, only the sand.
The devil has won, he has pushed her over the ledge.
The fear and the sadness are gone, and now death wraps her
up in her favourite blanket.

Jay_Jay
Junior Member

since 1999-09-18

Posts 38
San Diego, CA. USA

1 posted 1999-09-21 04:38 PM

I am not the critical type person because I like everything I read, but I can say I think that this is very well written.

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