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ossachile New Member
since 1999-09-07
Posts 6Philadelphia, PA, USA |
She says it's alright, and that she doesn't care, But things are just building up. She doesn't know how to bear her pain and let it go. She thinks things can't change, well they never did for her, but I can't understand why she won't cry, she hides behind her smile. Her life is pain, it's all she's ever known. She says she deserves what she gets, and she can't let her feelings go, even when they drag her down. She knows what she wants, but her life is so messed up now, and there's nothing she can do. Everything's all her fault. She can't see herself taking what she's got and just leaving it all behind. How will she survive? She can't leave. Her fears are taking her over, she can't see herself ever doing any good. She can't see the other side, they blind her from taking that step outside, And she would... All this comfort and security is false, and when she falls, it's going to be a long, hard drop and she'll never recover. She is alone and can't find her way to the top. And they drag her down as she's rising above them. "They just can't see the real me," she says to herself. But they can see her for all that she is and all that she can be. They see her as she hopes they can't. Her life has been trashed with their hatred. She can't get out, she can't go forward, the only way is up. She cries herself to sleep, for they have thrown her to the side. And left her to die as the animal they say she is, But what she can never be... [This message has been edited by ossachile (edited 09-08-99).] |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
Very powerful and thought provoking. This poem warrented at least two different readings. I found the poem to be rather ambigious at points leaving with only a partly finished story. In most cases this wouldn't bother me but I sense there is someing in it that would definitly add to the drama of the poem. The main offender of ambiguity is the word "they". Some other clue (for lack of a better word) would help with the relationship to the character. The only other negative is that one form wasn't adhered to. I admit I'm guilty of this flaw quite often. Not to say it must rhyme but I think that some order should be visible. I don't mean to be overly critical I just hope to speak my mind without offending. The things that I did like about this poem is that I can tell there is some very powerful backstory. I look forward to reading other poems of yours. ------------------ Opinions are like bellybuttons: eveybody's got 'em and they're good for nothing. |
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