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In silence she sleeps...
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In silence she sleeps... |
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Vamp New Member
since 1999-08-01
Posts 6Schofield Bks, HI, USA |
IN DREAMS In silence she sleeps, while it's quiet she dreams. She seems so innocent and calm, while she is drifting aloft, in a beautiful world that only she will ever see... In dreams Her innocent beliefs, so young and full of peace, seem so beautiful as she lays, so quietly on this day, In a world where nothing is as it should be... In dreams All bad that she sees, won't exist in her dreams. The softest touch upon her face, will keep the darkness at bay, along with a kiss that she will never see... In dreams Quiet as can be, she turns to smile at me. She doesn't know the kiss I stole, or of the love that I hold, for the girl who has once again drifted off to sleep... In dreams |
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Daniel2 Junior Member
since 1999-07-13
Posts 28Waterloo, Ontario, Canada |
Very driftingly written! Almost puts me too sleep reading it (That is a complement)! Could be a lullaby. I sense something dark and disturbing that you have tried to keep out of this poem. Why not let it in? You might get a more powerful poem. |
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