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JP
Senior Member

since 1999-05-25

Posts 1343
Loomis, CA

0 posted 1999-07-25 03:17 PM

I opened my soul to you,
not knowing my foolishness.
Now… now, I understand fully,
my damned stupidity.

Band-Aids cannot seal,
this gaping slash in my heart.
Cast iron straps, with welded clasp
yeah, that should do it.
Hold my heart together
in their hard, cold, eternal grasp.

I Removed my armor, exposed my soul
such uncalculated idiocy.
I suppose I deserve my pain,
because I dropped my shield
expecting you to protect me.

Whose fault? Is it mine? Yours?
Who gives a shit? It still hurts.
Will I love again? Care again?
I doubt it. Once is more than enough

My intellect is still intact.
my mind can work just fine,
without my heart's help.
Thirty-four years of soulless thought
has proven that point splendidly.

Can a man return to darkness
after touching the light?
Can a man re-embrace silence
after hearing the song?
Will water quench the thirst
created by the taste of wine?

I guess we'll see, won't we?

[This message has been edited by JP (edited 07-25-99).]

Balladeer

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Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

1 posted 1999-07-26 12:18 PM

If someone can find fault with this, they're gonna have to fight me!

JP
Senior Member

since 1999-05-25

Posts 1343
Loomis, CA

2 posted 1999-07-27 05:08 PM

I was just reading this peice, got distracted by ICQ and looked back, forgetting that it was my own work I was reading.

First thought I had was "removing my armor...exposing my soul" very cliche.

I could go on with a few other spots that I would consider weak, but that is what y'all are supposed to do...

Kinda embarrasing when you read your own stuff and think it's lame.

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Dum spiro, spero
JP

redwriter1
Member

since 1999-07-22

Posts 480
Franklin, TN

3 posted 1999-07-28 06:59 PM

wow!.. Can I put that last "verse". (sorry i'm a songwriter, smile) on a poster??

very nice.. sounds like Kahlil Gabran (hope I spelled that right)..

thank you, I will be saving that last "verse" to look at again and again.

JP
Senior Member

since 1999-05-25

Posts 1343
Loomis, CA

4 posted 1999-07-30 02:20 PM

You can put anything I write, anywhere you like, as long as I get the royalties of course.

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Dum spiro, spero
JP

Saxoness

Senior Member

since 1999-07-18

Posts 1102
Texas

5 posted 1999-08-12 07:15 PM

my favorite yet, JP, although I agree about the armor bit. Hmmm....a fight with Balladeer, how interesting.

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"Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone
I sing my tearful song which has charms only for me."

-Charles Brugnot

Poet deVine

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

6 posted 1999-08-13 03:10 AM

Wonderful. Sad but wonderful.

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