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Melis005 New Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 2Falmouth, Massachusetts, USA |
Sea's Sonnet  From bluff above I hear the sea call out, "I feel and know you, sea; we are the same." But from above I am filled with great doubt, Its squall, "I know your heart, your soul, your name." The need to hear its message draws me near. What wisdom can the sea so deep impart, And can it see within me crystal clear? How does it know my soul, my name, my heart? Then suddenly I feel the angry waves - The undertow, the anchor of my life. The gentle lapping that my psyche craves, Acknowledgement now nullifies my strife. I did not realize how I could be; I stand here knowing now I am the sea. [This message has been edited by Melis005 (edited 07-25-99).] |
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DreamEvil Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 2396 |
Tantalizingly eerie tale, flow reads very well. There are a few places that throw off the flow, but the content makes up for that. This is an excellent piece.  ------------------ Shall I indulge in flights of fancy hampered by clipped wings? DreamEvil© [This message has been edited by DreamEvil (edited 07-23-99).] |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
This is really, really excellent. I am very impressed. The only thing I would work on would be the meter of the 3rd line.... it doesn't seem to flow with the rest and seems a bit forced. Other than that, Fabulous! You have a God given talent.... clearly.... and I can't wait to read more of your work! |
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