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a question of midnight kisses
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a question of midnight kisses |
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Red Letter Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 85Allentown, PA |
a question of midnight kisses Has it happened again? Have you curled yourself a sleeping cat inside my sorrows, burrowed out another center in the soft of my soul? I am the epitome of vulnerability the skin of an onion distasteful like the charms on your tongue like the guile of your lips. Have I allowed you into me in the misty pink of surprise so that when you leave (the heat slipping from my breast) I am the empty pillow of a thousand nights prior? How dare you insult me with the tenderness of nostalgia and a midnight peck on the tip of my nose... 4/12/99 |
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Alain DeLaCendres Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 119Ohio |
Wow, I can't believe I missed this one until now..I don't know how I didn't see it..Maybe I should visit more often... This is great. I liked the lines "I am the epitome of vulnerablity / the skin of an onion distasteful" and "How dare you insult me / with the tenderness of nostalgia / and a midnight peck / on the tip of my nose..." If you would allow me, this is definatly one I would love to print so I can read it more often. May I? ------------------ Tout s'en va, tout passe, l'eau coule, et le couer oublie. |
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Red Letter Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 85Allentown, PA |
Wow, thank you so much for your comment.. Of course you can print it (as long as my name appears with it!  hehehe)This got buried so quickly, I didn't expect anyone would notice so thanks for noticing too!! Red |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I call this mining for gold. Alain struck a rich vein here. This is incredible Red! |
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Alain DeLaCendres Member
since 1999-07-02
Posts 119Ohio |
Never fear Red Letter, you name shall go with the poem. I want to remember the author of the poem too! ------------------ Tout s'en va, tout passe, l'eau coule, et le couer oublie. |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
Such sweet bitterness (I hope that makes sense to you - it does to me) sorrow and pain wrapped in soft caresses. Fabulous work my sweet. Furor Poeticus JP |
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Seaangel Member
since 1999-07-27
Posts 167Auckland, New Zealand |
Fantastic; I feel the outrage. This is powerful stuff. I like especially the first stanza, 'burrowed in the soft of my soul' is so evocative. I am eager to see more dealing with the same topic. |
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~one voice~ Senior Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 664Billings, MT USA |
Red Letter, this is truly amazing work you've done here! I am in awe! Wow! ------------------ ~onevoice~ "She looked at her life like lines, never-ending, constantly forming, reforming and bending." |
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Daniel2 Junior Member
since 1999-07-13
Posts 28Waterloo, Ontario, Canada |
Like the others, I love this poem, especially the first verse.It's superb in its softness and yielding pain. I find it very erotic. Since it's a critical forum, I have one comment. I don't like the line: "I am the epitome of vulnerability". To me, this line is telling, while all the other lines are showing or describing. In poetry, stating outright sometimes doesn't work. But again, Red Letter, congratulations on a fine poem. Took it for my collection, crediting it to Red Letter. Hope that's OK? [This message has been edited by Daniel2 (edited 08-02-99).] |
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