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Tweaking Bones (Inspired by a comment by jwesley)
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Tweaking Bones (Inspired by a comment by jwesley) |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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(Note to J. I tried emailing you for permission to use the words in the title. Please let me know if you'd rather me change the title.  ) Here goes. Let words lean on doors (gazes fixed suggestively) leaving thoughts with robes open askew around the shoulders like half dazed recipients of the urges of long starved lovers. Leave them shaken mouth open willing to drop their slipping shrouds and be naked vulnerable to the truths squirming uncomfortably beneath. Then Let words anchor in their flesh with claws and shake these thoughts demanding all framed foundations be quaking (knees near collapse) beneath the power of emotion raw scraped sweating tiny red beads (blood of the soul and all held back). Command bones (their passion motionless) to dance along with the music of epiphany rendered by the pens of poets who feel all they see and touch all they feel. "I know this love will tear me to pieces |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Wow! "mouth open" is right. This is beautiful. Love this.  |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Lady T...Softly written story of two lovers, enjoyed very much. Thanks for sharing...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
quote: It's a magic pen that can in mental, spiritual, and physical world all at the same time. You've done this here. I have never heard such a beautiful rendering of what poetry itself is in relation tot he poet. your ending wraps it up perfectly. I've read this many times. No matter what perspective I read it from, it always reveals a deeper sense of truth to me. Michael |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Love those 2 opening lines Temptress. This Poem gets down to the marrow of those bones! One of your Best! Sky~ ~Tell me the story about how the sun |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I like this. . . Let the words speak as they may. Perhaps, as they should. . . -- That which gives light must endure burning. |
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Forlorn Angel Member Posts 143 |
Trying to grasp this. It is very deep. Going back to read it again.  |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Jimmy my friend, What a blessing you are! You know you are my idol when it comes to capturing the butterfly of love. You never cease to amaze.You always touch my heart and water my eyes. Don't know how things are with you, hoping and praying it is tolerable. Hugs and prayers ~L |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Boy is my face red! Somehow, somewhere is a reply to this poem thinking Jimmy wrote it. Major brain fart. My only defense is the poem blew my mind. L |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
From your first line I painted my own picture of what was to follow and I was not disappointed. Well worth several reads. Rex |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
pure beauty here yann |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
It's been some time since I read some poems here,good to see that your poetry is still great. Best wishes Goldenrose. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Hmm, haven't popped in here in quite awhile. I thought I'd already been here and that I was honored that you would find something usable in something of mine. Of course I (thought) I said YES - guess my mind was on vacation . . . as it quite often is, these days. enjoyed, j. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Where are my manners? Sheesh! Thanks to everyone for the support and responses to this. I usually address each comment individually, but life has gotten kind of busy. It was always here that I could find support and inspiration. This is still better than social media apps! "I know this love will tear me to pieces |
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