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Kingswood (Diatelle)
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Kingswood (Diatelle) |
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Marshalzu  
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking 
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Kingswood (Diatelle) Breeze Leaves sway Whipped away Amidst grey skies The trees will bend yet stay Rooted deep that no storm may prise From loam nor earth nor clodden clay excise The gale may rage and shriek amongst unyielding trees The wind, the ash and oak and elm defies The gusts, the blows, the howls, the cries As dancing leaves delay The wind its prize One more day And they Ease |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
I'll admit the form is new to me. You did very well with it though. trees are very resilient in the face of nature, it's only when they have to face man they struggle. Michael |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
"battles" between trees and winds, excellent and swift, descriptive as ever, bravo yann |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Matrshalzu...This looks like a very hard style of writing. The shape and the rhyme well done. I'm sure Balladeer would enjoy this very much since he was always exploring different types of poetry...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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Marshalzu
since 2001-02-15
Posts 2681Lurking |
@Michael. A completely new form for me as well. Thanks for the read @2isnander2. Oh it was definitely a battle, I was watching the wind play through the leaves and branches of the woods behind my house as I wrote. Thanks for the read. @Paul Wilson. I would have loved to have Balladeer critique it, I've spent quite a bit of time reading his words in the workshop since my return and will definitely be trying a few of the forms he championed there. |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
Mz, Enjoyed the form & content..I'm a tree-hugger..lover whatever you want to call it. Sky~ Sometimes..Miracles are just good people |
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