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2islander2
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0 posted 2020-07-06 08:04 PM



In the rearview mirror


I’m leaving you behind,
O CITY. Talkative, rambling,
You know only SPARKLE,
You don’t know how to give love,
I leave you in my rearview mirror
You set me up, what a big trap,
From your bright POSTERS, whimsical Neon Lights,
Brilliant, tirelessly display cases,
O the countless nets,
O hasty and talkative girls,
The girls covered in fake jewelry,
You don’t know, City, giving love,
But to demonstrate, to feel guilty, to draw ideas,
O CITY, I leave you behind
TWINKLE, TWINKLE, TWINKLE,
Your passions are so complex,
Unfortunately, your feelings are superficial,
O young girls and their learned mirrors,
O mature women and their salons,
Adolescents and their small communities,
Too short FLICKERINGS,
I’m leaving you, and you too people,
I leave you, O CITY,
You don’t know how to give love,
I’ll leave you alone,
The ROAD is before me,
quiet, Slow and infinite.


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augustsky
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1 posted 2020-07-06 10:52 PM


Sounds as if a wise maturity has come..
& moving on is the best direction.

Well put Yann..

Sky~

Sometimes..Miracles are just good people
with kind hearts~

Marshalzu
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2 posted 2020-07-07 03:40 AM


The bright lights are enticing but when that's all there is it can leave you feel a little empty.
Marchmadness
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3 posted 2020-07-07 05:00 AM


I definitely relate to this, yann.
2islander2
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4 posted 2020-07-07 07:00 AM


thanks sky for the pertinent comment, i really experience that poem , when i leave my town everyday
yann

2islander2
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5 posted 2020-07-07 07:05 AM


thanks marshalzu, i only can agree, and thank you


yann

2islander2
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6 posted 2020-07-07 07:07 AM


thanks Ida, i Know you a little bit better
have a nice day
yann

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7 posted 2020-07-07 07:28 AM


There are so many great lines here, and much truth when talking about young girls and women. I love being in the city, but this does make me want to slide quietly and into the front seat beside you.  

"How much is real? So much to question
An epidemic of the mannequins
Contaminating everything"

Stone Sour



2islander2
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8 posted 2020-07-07 08:08 AM


thanks temptress, this is delightful, i would like too take the road for days, i agree with you, i depicted only one side of the city mirror, alli is not bad for sure

have  a nice day


yann

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