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soul drifter
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since 2004-09-08
Posts 711
Colorado

0 posted 2019-01-06 01:32 AM


Broken Laughter

Belonging
not yet
I seek a river of arms and legs
in this night of rain and sweat
retracing
my steps
the hollow sound of my Chucks
they echo with growing intent

I hear your broken laughter like glass
a shatter halo I wear to save my ass
I hear your broken laughter far away
on the other side of midnight I'll make my way
clear into your arms and sway
forever this way

Thirsty
you bet
I'm a man on a desert crawl
don't mess with a desperate heart
bursting
get set
I need a torrential love affair
I'm ready for a love kickstart

I hear your broken laughter thunder
strike me down and take me under
I hear your broken laughter which way
on the other side of midnight I'll begin to play
a love song singing please stay
forever this way

New York you dark mistress
I'm a picture of distress
you keep me
from my destiny
I gotta rise above this mess
she said she'll wear a little pink and black dress
I wanna mix a cocktail of her perfume and my cologne
most of all I'm sick of being all alone
oh that laughter
that sweet broken laughter
is what I'm after
feet don't fail me now

I hear your broken laughter like glass
a shatter halo I wear to save my ass
I hear your broken laughter far away
on the other side of midnight I'll make my way
clear into your arms and sway

Hey
I hear your broken laughter thunder
strike me down and take me under
I hear your broken laughter which way
on the other side of midnight I'll begin to play
a love song singing please stay
forever this way
forever and a day
forever this way
okay?

Life is a tale told by an idiot, full of sound and fury, signifying nothing.

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
1 posted 2019-01-06 05:50 AM


Love this!
Too many great lines to pick just one. When one is intent on romance, Heaven help them!
Great write. ~L

Poet In Pink
Senior Member
Posts 1066
MI
2 posted 2019-01-06 11:19 PM


Soul Drifter ~ Your lyrical lines flow down the page like silk ~ I do so enjoy your writing
Alana

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US
3 posted 2019-01-07 07:00 PM


I Really like this Souls, the only thing
I would omit is "chucks"..maybe use 'thoughts'..or 'breathing'..then continue with 'echos'. You're too good not to think
of a better replacement, or not..up to you.(jmho)
So many unique & 'catch your attention' lines
throughout this piece Poet.

Enjoyed..
Sky~

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