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augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

0 posted 2018-11-25 02:47 AM

Tree-line Of Winter~

On the edge..
at the tree-line of Winter,
where the glow of lamp
calls all home, and inside,
watch the trees bow to the night,
as snow-ghosts leap and swirl
in blue cloaks,
begetting a blizzard child.

Deep in December I ached for you,
as now,
all I ask is that you hold me
by the last firelight,
when the wolves bay,
and the vanishing nears.

Just hold me..
hold me at the tree-line of winter,
landscaped lush with white tears,
the last riff of our song,
till time is no more.

(c)Augustsky

OwlSA
Member Rara Avis

since 2005-11-07

Posts 9347
Durban, South Africa

1 posted 2018-11-25 05:41 AM

Exquisite!

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

2 posted 2018-11-25 01:25 PM

What a wonderful and amazing piece of composition.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

3 posted 2018-11-25 02:08 PM

Just beautiful, my friend . . . touching to the core.

j.

Paul Wilson

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since 2002-07-07

Posts 4711
United States

4 posted 2018-11-25 04:54 PM

augustsky...Eerily romantic. Really good Enjoy looking into your mind. You have a lot of talent Keep up the good writing...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

2islander2
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since 2008-03-12

Posts 6825
by the sea

5 posted 2018-11-25 05:18 PM

exquisite, yes, images are delicate and romantic,
yann

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

6 posted 2018-11-26 02:56 AM

Owl, What a Lovely comment, Thank you much.
Pleased you liked this piece Dear lady.

Sky~

~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

7 posted 2018-11-26 02:58 AM

Jerrypat, Glad this Poem was recieved so well,your thoughts appreciated dear Poet.

Sky~

~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

8 posted 2018-11-26 03:00 AM

J, What a Sweet comment, I thank you Poet.

Sky~

~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

9 posted 2018-11-26 03:04 AM

"enjoy looking into your mind"..well Paul..
sometimes it's buzzin', sometimes not.

Humbled by your kind reply, Thank you much.

Sky~

~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

10 posted 2018-11-26 03:06 AM

Awww..Thank you Yann, appreciate your take
of my Poem.

Sky~

~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius

since 2009-10-10

Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere

11 posted 2018-11-26 07:23 AM

Sky,
Precious! It resonates so deep within me I wish I could have written it. I love your style so much! I like to think you give my muse a good elbow to the ribs. ~L

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

12 posted 2018-11-26 10:59 PM

L, You're quite the writer yourself..hope you truly know that.
Thank you, one of the nicest compliments I could receive.

Sky~

~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06

Posts 16975
South Louisiana

13 posted 2019-01-02 07:50 PM

Ahhh . . . Sky . . . Thank you for composing and sharing this beautiful poem. Just had to say it twice.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

14 posted 2019-01-03 08:38 AM

this had such a nice warm feeling....gifting the reader with deeper feelings, long forgotten. very nice smooth read....

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

15 posted 2019-01-03 09:07 AM

What a beautiful write! I especially love the ending lines... such powerful emotion and images.

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

16 posted 2019-01-04 10:54 PM

Thank you Poet Jerry for the re-visit.

Sky~

~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

17 posted 2019-01-04 10:56 PM

Thank you much LeeJ, & suthern..appreciate your read & warm replies.

Sky~

~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~

Larry C

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since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

18 posted 2019-01-08 01:04 AM

I confess to liking this a lot. It's the longing that I find appealing. Held my attention all the way through. Thank you.

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07

Posts 2417
In The Mirror

19 posted 2019-01-08 03:07 AM

quote:
"snow-ghosts leap and swirl
in blue cloaks,
begetting a blizzard child"

Perhaps more truth than poetry in these beautifully sculpted words, Miss Sky.
When moonlight falls on freshly fallen snow,
and the wind dances across its surface, just so...
your "snow-ghosts do indeed appear, and "swirl in blue cloaks".

I haven't seen snow like that or snow at all very much in a while, but your poetry brings it all back delightfully.

...just bein' Bluesy

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

20 posted 2019-01-09 05:13 PM

Thank you Larry,pleased you liked,
appreciate your read.

Sky~

~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

21 posted 2019-01-09 05:21 PM

This was actually inspired by a blizzard,
that night the wind was furious, & the drifts!

Thank you Bluesy, there are times when the snow can mesmerize.

Sky~

~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~

Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California

22 posted 2019-09-28 08:25 AM

Lovely writing, augustsky.

augustsky
Senior Member
Posts 828
midwest US

23 posted 2019-10-07 07:45 PM

Thank you marchmadness, you're very kind.

Sky~

A Poem Begins as a
Lump in the Throat,
A Sense of Wrong,
A Home-Sickness,
A Love-Sickness.

~Robert Frost

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