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Gone to Ashes
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Gone to Ashes |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere 
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The fire in my soul has burned down to ashes. What embers may remain are buried deep beneath the gray. Not beyond rekindling, with the right kind of tender. A little dried grass with political roots are sure to ignite with a flicker of anger and a flame of frustration. My heart is again warmed with passion. But it is only the pull of Patriotism. Like a grass fire on the Prairie, it can spread fast and far. It consumes in an instant, then out. Ah, but the dried leaves of autumn can coax a flicker of passion from patient embers. Dead branches feeding the flame into long tongues licking the hardwood logs of love into a blaze. The red maple reminds me of those days of passion, as I stare at the ashes with a handful of grass. LGR(C)11/2/18 |
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2islander2 Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825by the sea |
Hi lori, this is excellent, like a lesson of optimism, the images are graceful yann |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Thanks Yann, You give the sweetest compliments! ~L |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
yes, Lori, mine to, mine to....well done, a wonderful read but all to sad.... |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
LeeJ, Yes it is sad, but I like to think there is some hope in that there is enough embers left to rekindle. We have an old wood burner we use in the winter in the garage and there is something to be said about the sense of satisfaction you get bringing a fire back from a few embers. There is a knack and it takes patience. Success strikes a primal chord. ~L |
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augustsky Senior Member Posts 828 midwest US |
L, I really liked the premise here, this is well thought out, & leaves the reader with that tiny flicker of hope. Also..there is something special and satisfying about bringing a fire back to its full-burn.  Enjoyed.. Sky~ ~Don't Quit Your Day Dream~ |
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Lori Grosser Rhoden Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202Fair to middlin' of nowhere |
Thanks Sky! I'm so happy that you were able to appreciate this poem to its fullest. I'm really enjoying you here at PIP-or as I like to think of it-the big blue buffet. ~L |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Do not understand how I missed this one, my friend. "with passion. But it is only the pull of Patriotism." Yep, Patriotism . . . We both have that pull, its a shame we are pulling together in different directions. Heh.Heh ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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Marchmadness Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271So. El Monte, California |
I like it. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I read the first several lines thinking of love, relationships and lost chances - and was nodding with every word, empathy and sympathy seeping from my pores. But then I realized I was on the wrong track - art imitating life. LOL The error was all mine and my mindset, though - and once I switched mental gears, I fully appreciated the poem as written. And it's one to appreciate, one to remember, one that reminds that hope and passion can flare again in politics or personal life. Well done! |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
Ooops! |
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