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2islander2
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by the sea

0 posted 2018-09-08 10:05 PM



Every time you see a long truck
Think to this girl with the long hair
Every time we speak about Paris
Think to this girl who told you yes.


Every time you see Depardieu
Think to this girl with the soft eyes
Every time you think of your mother
Think to this girl in the solitary charm


Every time you go to the cinema
Think to this girl that you will see again
If one day you only think of her
Forget sweetly this gentle demoiselle.

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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1 posted 2018-09-09 07:08 AM


Yann,
Sometimes I wonder if I'm reading you right or if I have missed something in translation.
Then I go back with a different mindset as I read that is not so literal. It is only then that I give myself the opportunity of a different more full perspective. Your poetry then becomes rich with texture and nuance. ~L

2islander2
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2 posted 2018-09-09 07:30 AM


oooppps Lori, your comment makes full sense, i am too lazy to make a poetic translation from poems i write in French, may be i could stop to write in English, and let the readers read french, it would be more faithful to the spirit of poetry, there is nothing more difficult that to translate poetry in a language you don't speak, i think the vest for you is to get that spirit and let grammatical away, this could help a bit to forgive me


yann

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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3 posted 2018-09-10 08:21 AM


Nothing to forgive Yann, It wouldn't be as rich, it wouldn't be as wonderfully you if it was in perfect English.  ~L
2islander2
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4 posted 2018-09-10 09:31 AM


so the show can go on, thanks Lori
yann

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