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Kellie_Cantrell
Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667
New York

0 posted 2018-07-20 01:03 AM


Thunder crashes overhead,
   Shadows casting from the corners
I couldn’t hold it in.

Haven’t I tried,
Hard enough?

Looking around me,
All the chaos falling
To pieces on the floor

Haven’t I cried,
Long enough?

Spinning hands,
Broken clock
Time just stands still

Why is it not,
Fast enough

Silence, breaks me
Chains me up,
But I am halfway out the door


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Lori Grosser Rhoden
Member Patricius
since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
1 posted 2018-07-20 04:34 AM


You go girl! I really like the power behind these words. You are almost there. Keep going and don't forget to slam the door behind you.
~L

JerryPat2
Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
2 posted 2018-07-20 02:28 PM


Heh.Heh . . . I cannot think of words to comment on after reading Lori's comments!
But I am 100% percent behind her. Never stop. Keep on keep on keeping on!

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Paul Wilson
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since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711
United States
3 posted 2018-07-20 04:32 PM


Kellie...Beautifully written. I will be waiting for the final stanza, where you keep walking out that door, never looking back only forward to a better life...Paul

~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~
Paul

2islander2
Member Ascendant
since 2008-03-12
Posts 6825
by the sea
4 posted 2018-07-20 08:37 PM


hello kellie, i hope you will push this door, and break the tantalizing silence,  I agree with all comments, this is a powerful poem and beautiful


yann

Clare Ite
Member
Posts 66
Where The Pallet Pins Play
5 posted 2018-07-21 12:38 PM


Life is a series of doors, dear Kellie.
The last one closes on you.

I always have time for you...

jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
6 posted 2018-08-16 10:07 PM


Really, really enjoyed this, my friend, especially the last stanza.

j.

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