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Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417
In The Mirror

0 posted 2018-04-20 03:37 AM


Taking seats in opposition
around an earthen table,
a lady enters the room wearing
little but a disfigured crown

She carefully concocts
bourbon sodas over ice,
weaning a despondent bottle
of its fleeting auburn tears

As the three lose inhibition,
an old game is transformed
by a new one that is spun
...I’m told nobody won

...just bein' Bluesy

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10
Posts 10202
Fair to middlin' of nowhere
1 posted 2018-04-20 04:45 AM


Bluesy,

     "weaning a despondent bottle
      of its fleeting auburn tears"

It is great lines like these that make your poetry so good and unmistakable Bluesy.
~L

JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
2 posted 2018-04-20 10:06 AM


I can't agree more to what Lori said.  You do have a special way with your verse.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Bluesy Socrateaser
Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417
In The Mirror
3 posted 2018-04-20 11:54 AM


Many thanks, Miss Lori.

Your replies exceed any poetry of mine.

...just bein' Bluesy

Bluesy Socrateaser
Member Elite
since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417
In The Mirror
4 posted 2018-04-20 11:57 AM


I very much appreciate your reading and comments, Jerry.

You've always been a 'column' of this 'community'. I hope you stick around for a long[er] time!

Thanks again!  

...just bein' Bluesy

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