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Bluesy Socrateaser
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In The Mirror

0 posted 2018-04-08 10:44 PM


I think some sleep sounder when they’re awake,
They should have realized it was all a mistake

Vacant and dreamlike they move through their life,
Stabbing their hopes with a honey-coated knife

Deserters from life refusing to phone,
Write numbing letters to those dead and gone

You can’t shake them to sleep, though God knows how you’ve tried,
Tell what they do, and they say that you’ve lied

Quietly screaming into this apathetic world,
as into the void their feelings are hurled

Facing upwards, sinking backward, then jumping in head first
Afraid of the light, terrified to look, while trying to control an abject thirst

Glazed looks disconcerting from those on the make
You know some do sleep sounder when they’re awake...


...just bein' Bluesy

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JerryPat2
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1 posted 2018-04-09 09:48 AM


Hah! I have known people you described herein, Blusey. during my life. And I completely agree with your thoughts. To live in the world within your own little self-absorbed cocoon is frightening. Damn good write.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10
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2 posted 2018-04-09 10:26 AM


Each stanza evokes an image and emotion Bluesy. Powerful write. ~L
Bluesy Socrateaser
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3 posted 2018-04-09 07:34 PM


Damn good reply, Jerry! Thanks so much!

...just bein' Bluesy

Bluesy Socrateaser
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4 posted 2018-04-09 07:35 PM


Much obliged, Miss Lori!

...just bein' Bluesy

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