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ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

0 posted 2018-03-29 08:44 AM



Don't know why I like these long acoustic guitar folk song types of lyrics but they just come out that way.....Ah what the hey anyway....LOL! I know this stuff ain't commercial but then everything I do every day is so it's just an escape.


Conpromise

Those high school sweetheart days we lived,
Testing out the so called sins
We'd sing in sunsets spilling gold
I remember songs we wrote.
Sittin on the graveyard fence
your searchin body so intense
my guitar strung against the world,
you right there my steady girl
mothered me just like a boy
I smothered you like a toy.

The world was ours at seventeen
me for you and you for me.
In the heat we'd sing a toast
to King and Taylor's lyric rotes,
the words of life we recognized
would mask the truth with compromise

One on one a sculpture carved
together we were modern art.
A model for the world to see
we'd sing of change with words of peace.
We were clean and music deep
just like moonlight on the sea.
We lived fairy tales of hope
brand new home the future wrote.
We made plans for endless tasks
working on our dreams to last.

Those growing years we spent together
we thought they'd go on forever.
But the nature of the boy
singing songs telling stories
opened doors beyond the stage
here tommorrow gone today.
When the praises came to rest
I tried to fight them with my best
but the change from boy to man
can blanket many early plans.

The years upon your welcome breast
have stayed with me at heart no less.
But I booked to other spoils
some freedom from our midnight oil.
Now I sing the tavern shift
a folksey rover with a gift.
But there's a lost unheard verse
that can't explain our love and work
So I play us but there's no you,
just beer drenched bars and late reviews.

But when it comes down to the truth
there was no gamble in our youth.
Swept away by rushing tides
we filled the needs we craved inside.
But changes flow from buried streams
an surface in the thoughts we breed.
it's never final past the end
Cause in the chorus I hear a friend.


The world was ours at seventeen
me for you and you for me.
In the heat we'd sing a toast
to King and Taylor's lyric rotes,
the words of life we recognized
would mask the truth with compromise

true love never looks after it's own interests

© Copyright 2018 Eric Lewis True - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
1 posted 2018-03-29 10:06 AM


Ahhh . . . This is almost a novelette, Eric. But you told of life and as your title suggested a compromising way of writing. Each stanza had me going back to my youthful days, each one told my story also. I was really delighted with this absolute jewel.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
2 posted 2018-03-29 11:15 AM


a song, a poem, an outburst of thoughts and feelings - it makes no difference - a beautful piece.

Note: in second to last stanza, first word of last sentence, should that be   'cause,  referencing the word because ?

Again, wonderful read, my friend!

j.

Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07
Posts 2417
In The Mirror
3 posted 2018-03-29 12:22 PM


Everyone here has been seventeen, no doubt and the struggles of Janis Ian come to mind.

...just bein' Bluesy

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
4 posted 2018-03-29 03:16 PM


Thanks Jerry, I guess we all can relate to parts of this acoustic ramble and that's great if I was able to take you there....

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
5 posted 2018-03-29 03:19 PM


Thanks for those words JW I appreciate the read and visit and yes "cause" is supposed to reference the word because, sort of a singing meter thing.
But don't worry I'm half crazy anyway....
Best regards!


Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

ethome
Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
6 posted 2018-03-29 03:22 PM


Thanks Bluesy I agree we all have our past reflections.
Janis Ian song was a great one for sure.
Actually was song of the year way back then.......
Probably helped her pay a lot of bills....

Eric

true love never looks after it's own interests

jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
7 posted 2018-03-30 11:22 PM


I think you may have missed my point. My understanding is the word cause (caws) in your piece is short for because (cuz) .  If that's true it should have and apostrophe (') before the word; as in     'cause (cuz)  .

-  'Cause (cuz) is short for Because. For ex.,  I   was late 'cause (because) I overslept.

-  Cause (caws) is the underlying reason for something.  For ex., Oversleeping was the cause of my being late.

j.

Starmcneil 1955
Member
Posts 174
Alberta, Canada
8 posted 2020-07-26 03:40 PM


Oh yes, a song from the past and from the heart...your words sing true and bring back some memories to me...well done
Marchmadness
Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 9271
So. El Monte, California
9 posted 2020-07-27 11:40 AM


I love your take on 17 although I would not wish to do it again.
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