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Oscillating Realities: Distortions Of Clarity Found In A Porous Wall

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Bluesy Socrateaser
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The tempting sunlight plays upon the glass, offering an affective panacea
to the sad slate-blue of a just another day within the walls

It's a lure, nothing more, like a mirage dangling through the expanded metal
which catches the thirsty eye, persuading the wary head to leave itself upon the rack

Dragging your lazy legs outside in search of a Spring that just isnít there,
you hear the soundof the steel doors closing with a bang, warning the sun that the trap has been sprung

As it disappears beyond the cover of a cotton-wool blanket, a sudden wind swoops down
to whip your ears and whisk away from you, poor fool, the heat so carefully absorbed from your body

Another mug for the swirling plastic bags to boast about...fleeced in the cold light of day

...just bein' Bluesy

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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1 posted 12-13-2017 04:50 AM       View Profile for Lori Grosser Rhoden   Email Lori Grosser Rhoden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lori Grosser Rhoden

This is heart wrenching. You captured cold indifference vibrantly here. You did a good job of portraying awful, so this is awfully good. ~L
Bluesy Socrateaser
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2 posted 12-15-2017 03:03 AM       View Profile for Bluesy Socrateaser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bluesy Socrateaser

...and it's awfully nice of you to say so, Miss Lori!  

As I've told you before, you have a fine-tuned intuition that allows you to see through the metaphors and get to the 'heart' of it. I don't deliberately stash meanings under rocks, it just comes out this way when I try to explain things. Many thanks, Miss Lori!   


...just bein' Bluesy
Poet In Pink
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Such stark vivid images you paint ~ The coldness...The clanking...The harsh reality...Tis' enough to rob one of spirit and sanity even...Reading your words touches my heart...I can't even imagine...As always thank you for sharing
Bluesy Socrateaser
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4 posted 12-16-2017 04:58 PM       View Profile for Bluesy Socrateaser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bluesy Socrateaser

Your reply clearly expresses your sensitivities, Miss Pinky. You see, you read, and you fully grasp what you find inside the words. Thank you for that and thank you for looking deeper and getting a feel for what you read.

Extraordinary reply.

...just bein' Bluesy

 
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