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They Cried

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s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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0 posted 10-12-2017 01:42 PM       View Profile for s1nfully_1nn0c3nt   Email s1nfully_1nn0c3nt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions   Click to visit s1nfully_1nn0c3nt's Home Page   View IP for s1nfully_1nn0c3nt

And he cried
Spilling out his tears
Spilling out his fears
It’ll be a long and trying time
“Haven’t you been overseas before”
His reply would break her heart
“I’ve never been afraid
        but now
I have something to lose”

And she cried
knowing what love is.

-Trina
...because the most powerful words in your life are "I might be wrong"...

© Copyright 2017 TrinaMarie73 - All Rights Reserved
JerryPat2
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1 posted 10-12-2017 03:51 PM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Email JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

You are still in fine form, Trina.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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2 posted 10-12-2017 09:46 PM       View Profile for s1nfully_1nn0c3nt   Email s1nfully_1nn0c3nt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit s1nfully_1nn0c3nt's Home Page   View IP for s1nfully_1nn0c3nt

Thanks Jerry! I wasn’t sure if it needed more or if it was good just the way it is- I’m still not sure lol
I’ve always struggled with “happy writing” but I felt like I needed to write this- almost like it had to be written.

-Trina
...because the most powerful words in your life are "I might be wrong"...

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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3 posted 10-13-2017 11:46 AM       View Profile for Lori Grosser Rhoden   Email Lori Grosser Rhoden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lori Grosser Rhoden

You haven't lost your touch. I think you ended it just fine with a whole lot of emotion just dangling there like a pińata.
To have spelled it all out would have lessened the impact. Ya done good kiddo! ~L
jwesley
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4 posted 10-13-2017 12:49 PM       View Profile for jwesley   Email jwesley   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for jwesley

I think it's PERFECT, as written!

j.
BluesSerenade
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5 posted 10-13-2017 08:22 PM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade

Knowing love is the most beautiful feeling..even under less than perfect circumstances.  

Wonderful poem...
LeeJ
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6 posted 10-14-2017 04:37 PM       View Profile for LeeJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LeeJ

such beauty and emotion.....
Poet In Pink
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7 posted 10-18-2017 10:24 PM       View Profile for Poet In Pink   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Poet In Pink

Trina this tugs at the heart-strings ~ Tenderly expressed emotions ~ Much enjoyed ~ Alana
s1nfully_1nn0c3nt
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8 posted 10-19-2017 01:45 PM       View Profile for s1nfully_1nn0c3nt   Email s1nfully_1nn0c3nt   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit s1nfully_1nn0c3nt's Home Page   View IP for s1nfully_1nn0c3nt

Thanx for looking in everyone and for your kind words- they mean a lot ❤️

-Trina
...because the most powerful words in your life are "I might be wrong"...

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