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Blackbirds on a Wire

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JerryPat2
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Okay, so this isn't vintage Jerry . . . Don't laugh, please.


I stared intently at blackbirds on a wire
they were lined in a row
as though someone had painted them there
fascinated, I continued to gaze
hoping to identify which one would fly away first
knowing if one flew
the coop so to speak
the rest would follow because of some unknown
inner requirement
determined was I to single out the leader
of the flock
(do you call a group blackbirds a flock?
even if they are not flocking
but sitting?)
I dared not blink
but I knew that at some point in time I would have to
but I refused
the world stood still
there was no noise about
although I knew cars were passing by
concentration
intense concentration on that damn line of blackbirds
"Hey!"
startled I inadvertently turned to the sound
a woman
unknown to me
said
"When I fall in love and marry
I want to be studied with that
same intense consideration
hearing the sound of fluttering wings
I turned too late
the blackbirds were in the air

ŠJune 29, 2017 / Jerry Pat Bolton

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

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Lori Grosser Rhoden
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1 posted 09-16-2017 12:06 PM       View Profile for Lori Grosser Rhoden   Email Lori Grosser Rhoden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lori Grosser Rhoden

Oh Jerry you are way too thin skinned. There is absolutely no reason to laugh at this delightful poem. We all play little mind games for one reason or another and I think the more active the brain the more the need to entertain it- yours included. And the woman's response I can so relate to. I'm so glad you choose to share it and it needs no disclaimer. ~L
JerryPat2
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Thank you ever so much, Lori . . . Your comments sorta made my day.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Poet In Pink
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Jerry...You writing this is nothing to laugh about ~ I'm with Lori it's delightful   The only thing I chuckled at was the lady squawking and scaring them away!  Thank YOU for the smile   Enjoyed!  Alana
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