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Bluesy Socrateaser
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since 2002-11-07
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In The Mirror

0 posted 2017-09-07 05:54 PM


Well baby, we've finished talking for the night,
but I still feel the warmth of you within me,
roaming through the hollows of my heart
that's been so empty for so long without you.

Keep my words among your many thoughts lover
and feel me smiling as I rest inside my shell
while threatening storm clouds move along the horizon,
even as others swing leisurely in their holy hammocks.

We danced to rhythms that were still hidden in time,
as we waited for days that came and went so quickly.
You whispered, telling me of all your favorite places
...I touched them and I felt the Summer heat.



...just bein' Bluesy

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JerryPat2
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since 2011-02-06
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1 posted 2017-09-08 09:14 AM


Superb wordplay, Bluesy. The first two lines perked my interest, and as I kept reading I realized just what kind of gem this special poem was.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Poet In Pink
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MI
2 posted 2017-09-08 02:44 PM


Penned to perfection Bluesy ~ Enjoyed your word play and how you expressed your emotions ~ Definitely a Sizzzzler     Much enjoyed ~ Alana
Bluesy Socrateaser
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3 posted 2017-09-09 03:52 AM


Appreciate your reading and comments very much JerryPat! Thanks!

...just bein' Bluesy

Bluesy Socrateaser
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4 posted 2017-09-09 03:53 AM


Many thanks to you Pinky! It's appreciated!

...just bein' Bluesy

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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since 2009-10-10
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5 posted 2017-09-13 07:55 AM


I really love the way you write about love,
you have an earthy, grounded feel to your words that have not been dipped in syrup because they are naturally sweet. ~L

Bluesy Socrateaser
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6 posted 2017-09-13 09:39 PM


Such very sweet comments from you, Lori Rhoden. Neither do I feel they are "syrup-dipped", for they move from your heart to your fingertips with no effort at all.

Thank you, dear lady.


BTS


...just bein' Bluesy

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