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soul drifter
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0 posted 09-05-2017 11:35 AM       View Profile for soul drifter   Email soul drifter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for soul drifter

Astound Me

I see you and me
and all we can be
and all I ever want to be...

My throat dries and my heart melts
as your fingers take a drive I think I felt
love for the first time in history
the bee sting of mystery
like a cold rush of blood to the head
tingling body crawling back to bed
more than ready for the moment
more than ready for the moment
to astound me

My bones creak in tune with you
as true as Billie Holiday singing blue
love that'll last all of history
the crescendo of misery
I'm riding the coda till the dawn's light
thirsty for whenever you are in sight
more than ready for your beauty
more than ready for your beauty
to astound me

I see you and me
and all we can be
and all I ever want to be
is beside you

Sometimes I lie awake
and measure how long it will take
to get from the love I dream
to the love we make
still I lie awake
and I'm thinking
about the love we make
and the distance in between

Till then I am
more than ready for the moment
more than ready for the moment
more than ready for your beauty
can't wait to see your beauty
more than ready for you
to astound me

And I see you and me
and all we can be
and all I ever want to be
is beside you

And love
Love
Love is astounding me

"Beauty has a way of seeming unconcerned" - Neil Finn, 'Terrorize Me'

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JerryPat2
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1 posted 09-05-2017 12:05 PM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Email JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

You really got it going on with this fantastic poem about love and what it can bring.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Lori Grosser Rhoden
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2 posted 09-05-2017 01:20 PM       View Profile for Lori Grosser Rhoden   Email Lori Grosser Rhoden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lori Grosser Rhoden

I like this a lot! ~L
JamesMichael
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3 posted 09-06-2017 12:13 AM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Nice expression of the feelings of love...james
Bluesy Socrateaser
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In The Mirror


4 posted 09-06-2017 12:41 AM       View Profile for Bluesy Socrateaser   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Bluesy Socrateaser

quote:
"Sometimes I lie awake
and measure how long it will take
to get from the love I dream
to the love we make"
For me, this is the heart of your poetry, which I felt was warmly enticing.  

...just bein' Bluesy

BluesSerenade
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since 10-23-2001
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By the Seaside


5 posted 09-06-2017 01:26 PM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade

Love this passionate poem.  My goodness you never cease to amaze me with your poetry.

Wonderful, you.
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