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soul drifter
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0 posted 08-17-2017 03:31 PM       View Profile for soul drifter   Email soul drifter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for soul drifter

Your Eyes

As a bee sting rain conquers the evening side
I watch the stars fall in your eyes
washing every pent up emotion away
so this is how I know I'm going to stay
walking six inches off the street
to a place where all the young lovers meet
just one last puzzle piece
then I'll see my dreams complete

Shaped by the soft pounding rain
in your touch
I'm a man anew set sailing again
it's too much
but I can never get enough
just a glance of your eyes
and you've called my bluff

Your eyes
kingdoms rise and fall
but in your eyes
a fire that never dies
it never fades at all

As a birdcall sun ignites the morningside
I watch the clouds part in your eyes  
the light pours majestic like the finest wine
so this is how I'm going to fall from the vine
smiling a hundred miles long
incessantly humming my favorite song
love memorized by heart
and I'll see my dreams as art

Shaped by the soft pounding rain
in your touch
I'm a man anew set sailing again
it's too much
but I can never get enough
just a glance of your eyes
and you've called my bluff

Your eyes
angels run and play
deep in your eyes
a fire that never dies
never will it fade away

And this is how I know I'm going to stay
walking six inches off the street
to a place where all the young lovers meet
just one last puzzle piece
then I'll see my dreams complete

"Whatever makes you weird is probably your greatest asset"-Joss Whedon

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BluesSerenade
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1 posted 08-22-2017 04:27 PM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade


As a birdcall sun ignites the morningside
I watch the clouds part in your eyes  
the light pours majestic like the finest wine 
so this is how I'm going to fall from the vine
smiling a hundred miles long
incessantly humming my favorite song 
love memorized by heart
and I'll see my dreams as art
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What can I say that I haven't already said.

You write so fine!!!!  
soul drifter
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2 posted 08-22-2017 10:17 PM       View Profile for soul drifter   Email soul drifter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for soul drifter

I really appreciate you saying it anyway. Thank you so much Blues.
BluesSerenade
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3 posted 09-29-2017 11:44 PM       View Profile for BluesSerenade   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for BluesSerenade

Just cause I'm missing your poetry.
Lori Grosser Rhoden
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4 posted 09-30-2017 09:35 AM       View Profile for Lori Grosser Rhoden   Email Lori Grosser Rhoden   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Lori Grosser Rhoden

I loved this! It was such a celebration of discovery and love.

only one small critique-

"Shaped by the soft pounding rain"

Soft and pounding contradict each other. ~L
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