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In the Hall There's Somebody Bad

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JerryPat2
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Huddled in the corner, lights out,
I shiver and shake, I'm half clad
I'm so scared I can't even shout,
In the hall there's somebody bad.

I'm scrunched in the corner, afraid,
Oh, I'm sure that I will go mad;
I feel like I have been betrayed,
In the hall there's somebody bad.

©March 13, 2017 / Jerry Pat Bolton



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LeeJ
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1 posted 08-02-2017 12:07 PM       View Profile for LeeJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LeeJ

This reminded me of when I was a small little girl, and how I slept up in the attic.  It was scary, with a pull chain light up on the ceiling.  So I hooked up a string to the pull chain.  When I went to bed, I could safely hide under the covers, and pull the light off, with the string.  LOL

Afraid of the dark...and what hovered within...lol
JerryPat2
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2 posted 08-02-2017 12:11 PM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Email JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

Lee, thank you for your response, and you had enough in it to write a novel. You ought to give it some thought.

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3 posted 08-02-2017 01:36 PM       View Profile for Cerulean   Email Cerulean   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerulean

Jerry, could this poem be related to when a person has disassociative identity disorder? And one hand (i.e., personality) doesn't know or remember what the other hand does?

As one who enjoys reading psychology topics, that's just my first impression upon reading this poem. An interesting read, nonetheless.
JerryPat2
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Cerulean, that is a good take on the inner workings of my poem. I wanted to show how a full grown man could be terrified inside his own house by noises on the outside. You can hang the “disassociative identity disorder” to the poem, because the man is terrified to the extent, that at  this point, he very clearly knows not what to do. Thank you, Cerulean.

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Then LeeJ was more accurate in her assessment of your poem than I was. I gotta say, you write some really good poems... and this was definitely one of them. I think it's a survival instinct we all have built in to an extent, as you can see in many kids who need a night light
JerryPat2
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Yes, Lee pretty much hit the nail on the head with her response.

Thank you for delving into my poem, Cerulean, I very much appreciate it.

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7 posted 08-02-2017 09:15 PM       View Profile for Cerulean   Email Cerulean   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerulean

Definitely, anytime Jerry! In this case, it was more of a literal vs figurative thing... I went a bit too far on the figurative side reading your poem.
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