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Cerulean
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0 posted 08-01-2017 07:36 PM       View Profile for Cerulean   Email Cerulean   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Cerulean

"Isle of the dead"

A gray isle approaches
Shroud in ancient mist,
Trees tall and barren
Creep upon and flicker,
Dissolving courage...
You came for something,
But your memory falters...
Step by step proceeding,
Further into the shadows
Where darkness dwelt,
As a tropical storm
looms, threatening the isle...
In your hand clasped
Is a picture, of someone
Lost, unknown to you...
Things suddenly emerge,
Buildings once renown
In bustling days gone,
Echoes of a golden age
Of a mighty port city,
Where jewels sparkled
As summer's sun brightly
Gleamed upon the sea...
Those thoughts fleet
In your head constantly,
Flashbacks forgotten...
Like dreams slowly to be
That once were, but hidden
Cannot release somehow...
Webs cling upon the doors
As buildings get closer,
Spun in dizzy, quick fashion;
Slowly, the memories return...
In your eyes, water wells up
Yet you know not why...
Obstructing your memories
Is a stellar flash of light;
But the buildings give hope,
To unlock memories locked.
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JerryPat2
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1 posted 08-01-2017 07:42 PM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Email JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

Ah, a poem straight from a heart looking at the unfamiliar, but yet he knows he should remember. Still . . . Sometimes it is better to not seek out those hidden memories. Very well penned poem.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~
Cerulean
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2 posted 08-01-2017 07:53 PM       View Profile for Cerulean   Email Cerulean   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerulean

That's an eloquent description of what this poem could be about. Thanks for your kind words, Jerry.
JerryPat2
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3 posted 08-01-2017 08:14 PM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Email JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

"what this poem could be about"

Heh.Heh But that isn't what it is about, is it Cerulean, and I'm not to sure it was an "eloquent description."

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Cerulean
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4 posted 08-01-2017 08:27 PM       View Profile for Cerulean   Email Cerulean   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerulean

***SPOILERS BELOW***

Jerry- Your first reply (all of it) is correct in most cases. But in the case of this poem the first sentence in your reply is correct and the second may not be.

You see, this poem is based on a mixture of my own imagination and Skara Brae from the Ultima video game series. In that example, it would've been better to seek out those hidden memories since the isle of Skara Brae became an isle of the dead due to necromancy. See here: http://wiki.ultimacodex.com/wiki/Skara_Brae

And the funny thing is... Skara Brae is also a real historic port village. Look it up sometimes  

However, this poem can be read playfully in a number of different contexts without knowing where it's originating from.

[This message has been edited by Cerulean (08-02-2017 07:52 PM).]

JerryPat2
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5 posted 08-01-2017 08:50 PM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Email JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

Oh boy. I got into Skara Brae as much as I could Cerulean, which isnít much, because honestly my brain has been through so much sixties acid that I quite often actually have those flashbacks they told us about. In other words, my friend, Iím a lightweight in the brain department and am unable to get into anything except what I conjure up myself. Thanks for pointing me in the right direction, but I failed to "get into it." Sorry buddy.

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Cerulean
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6 posted 08-01-2017 08:57 PM       View Profile for Cerulean   Email Cerulean   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerulean

That's perfectly OK. That's why it's better to sometimes not know where a poem is coming from, so you can think in the context that works best for you. Apologies if I have ruined the enjoyment by disclosing too much.
JerryPat2
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7 posted 08-01-2017 08:58 PM       View Profile for JerryPat2   Email JerryPat2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit JerryPat2's Home Page   View IP for JerryPat2

You haven't ruined anything, buddy, not one thing.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

LeeJ
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8 posted 08-02-2017 10:25 AM       View Profile for LeeJ   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for LeeJ

this read was powerful, and reminded me of someone struggling with MS, or some form of memory loss...don't know if that was your intent...

Well done!
LeeJ
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this read was powerful, and reminded me of someone struggling with MS, which for me, harbors a lot of memory loss, or some form of memory loss within others...don't know if that was your intent...

Well done!
Cerulean
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10 posted 08-02-2017 01:18 PM       View Profile for Cerulean   Email Cerulean   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerulean

LeeJ, that was definitely my intent when I added in the memory loss part (not a part of the game I played long ago, btw).

The buildings at the end of the poem can also represent the things that hold our memories. The flash of light blinds you to what you're looking for, and it may take time for the light to reduce in intensity so the memory resurfaces. Such as if you ever have difficulty recalling a word right away but it comes ten seconds later.

There are yet other contexts in which these aspects (buildings, flash of light, etc) can be read differently (such as literally instead of figuratively) -- depending on how one likes to interpret them.
Cerulean
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11 posted 08-03-2017 12:29 AM       View Profile for Cerulean   Email Cerulean   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerulean

And the "Well done!" is appreciated.
Poet In Pink
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I love the feelings of mystery and adventure throughout ~ With a little splash of Deja vu to spice up the imagination   Enjoyed muchers Cerulean   Alana
Cerulean
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13 posted 08-07-2017 10:50 PM       View Profile for Cerulean   Email Cerulean   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Cerulean

Perfectly said. That was one of my goals in writing this poem. Thanks Alana!
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14 posted 08-09-2017 08:37 PM       View Profile for 2islander2   Email 2islander2   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for 2islander2

a great moment of emotion, the verses are just perfect to free some hidden memories and perhaps some fears, don't really know but feelings are high, very "truly"  penned


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