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LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296


0 posted 2017-07-25 02:47 PM


Mangroves of persimmon, soft delicate defined
accurate description of beautiful poetry & articulate rhyme

Flowing gently, interpretations feel our musical harmony
expression & consideration within the love of our classical melody

Ask not, but give gentle fruit of the vintage vine
unwavering, motionless, peaceful until the end of time

There is a place within, where lovers disappear
together in happiness joining experiencing, sharing elation & tears

Refreshing moments of love, growth, spiritual prosperity & blessings
one within our creator, lights our love with fire progressing

As a double sunrise in morning's tropical warm isles
you, my wonderful love, be alive and always generate your lovely smile

Placid in the moments of unseen treasures
exceptionally happy when we are together

Precious smiles, your touch through and through
soft, this place, where we faithfully believe love's enveloping value

Entrusted soul, precious intricate and divine our garden's weave
you are paramount and a most intricate part of my summer's eve

Astounding, profound, your heart & loving understanding
two fold our moments shared with each new day expanding

I pray happiness in all, which embraces your heart
and our God will bestow you His most life-filled articulate art

For my love, from you I have appreciated this view
an ocean of cloudless skies painted azure blue




one of my first poems....

[This message has been edited by LeeJ (07-27-2017 05:51 AM).]

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JerryPat2
Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975
South Louisiana
1 posted 2017-07-25 03:33 PM


Throughout each line of this amazing poem is the fulfillment of your inner self. You write with the wisdom of great scholars. I stand by my words.

~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~

Honeybunch
Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115
South Africa
2 posted 2017-07-26 03:32 PM


Lovely, LeeJ.  You've got me wondering what my first poems were about.  It really was a long time ago for me but I do know they got me thinking about life and love - still thinking I guess.  Oh, and i'm sure there'll be no objection to you posting more from your archives.  Always enjoy your words.
JamesMichael
Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA
3 posted 2017-07-26 09:09 PM


Beautiful flow of poetry...james
Cerulean
Member
Posts 109

4 posted 2017-07-28 03:19 AM


One of your first poems? Wow, that's impressive for starting out! I love how everyone has their own unique styles of writing poetry. Yours is just so tranquil. It requires slow and careful reading to grasp fully what's being said.

Another thing... I like your Constructive Critiques quote, which is visible only when I reply to your poem. Have a nice day.

Poet In Pink
Senior Member
Posts 1066
MI
5 posted 2017-07-30 07:31 PM


Pleased to meet you Lee   From beginning to end this is simply beautiful ~ You've painted such lovely images in my mind ~ Much enjoyed!!  Alana
jwesley
Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563
Spring, Texas
6 posted 2017-07-30 10:51 PM


I think I've probably read most of yours, my friend - if now, definitely my loss, as I've always love to read your works - this is just as beautiful too.

j.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549
By the Seaside
7 posted 2017-08-22 04:22 PM


Every verse is stunning and could stand alone.  As a whole your poem is dreamy, romantic and speaks to the heart in whispers.  

Your writing is both surreal and serene.

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