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Lovers in Abstract
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Lovers in Abstract |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
Lovers in Abstract See me now walking a thorny path until undone to see my love set shining and new hear me now the screaming silence of the one who'll love you better than he'll love you and I promise to until the angels fall until the angels fall See the lovers along the shore see each abstraction that'll lead me to your door in my heart like ice on fire building cities of dreaming upon this desire and if by chance I come to your window tonight will you let me inside 'cause love is like a light and I'm a moth in restless flight and my soul hunger can't be denied Hear me out my words stumble into rhyme I'm inarticulate but true feel me out with you there is no time he doesn't need you like I need you and I'll all for you until the angels fall until the angels fall Hear the lovers laugh and play hear each abstraction that'll lead me your way in my heart like thunder and rain crashing so softly into attics of my brain and if luck be a lady will you be mine tonight say the magic word 'cause love is like the sky and I'm diving from a great height and my soul thirst won't be deterred Can you see lovers in abstract dancing into the blue you can see he can't love you not like I do and I promise to until the angels fall until the angels fall and I'm all for you until the angels fall "Whatever makes you weird is probably your greatest asset"-Joss Whedon [This message has been edited by soul drifter (07-23-2017 07:59 AM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Wonderful...james |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
beautifully written and articulated |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
True to form. Your poetry touches deep in this heart of mine. |
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JerryPat2 Member Laureate
since 2011-02-06
Posts 16975South Louisiana |
When you are reaching for that very "special" person you have called it like it is and what it feels like . . . "'cause love is like the sky and I'm diving from a great height." Excellent. ~ If they give you ruled paper, write sideways. ~ |
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Cerulean Member Posts 109 |
Passionately written. It's a piece of work that can flow very nicely off the tongue, similar to lyrics that are sung. This line is particularly powerful: quote: I loved it. Enjoyed. |
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