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soul drifter
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0 posted 07-22-2017 02:10 PM       View Profile for soul drifter   Email soul drifter   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for soul drifter

Lovers in Abstract

See me now
walking a thorny path until undone
to see my love set shining and new
hear me now
the screaming silence of the one
who'll love you better than he'll love you
and I promise to
until the angels fall
until the angels fall

See the lovers along the shore
see each abstraction that'll lead me to your door
in my heart like ice on fire
building cities of dreaming upon this desire
and if by chance I come to your window tonight
will you let me inside
'cause love is like a light and I'm a moth in restless flight
and my soul hunger can't be denied

Hear me out
my words stumble into rhyme
I'm inarticulate but true
feel me out
with you there is no time
he doesn't need you like I need you
and I'll all for you
until the angels fall
until the angels fall

Hear the lovers laugh and play
hear each abstraction that'll lead me your way
in my heart like thunder and rain
crashing so softly into attics of my brain
and if luck be a lady will you be mine tonight
say the magic word
'cause love is like the sky and I'm diving from a great height
and my soul thirst won't be deterred

Can you see
lovers in abstract dancing into the blue
you can see
he can't love you not like I do
and I promise to
until the angels fall
until the angels fall
and I'm all for you
until the angels fall


"Whatever makes you weird is probably your greatest asset"-Joss Whedon

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JamesMichael
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1 posted 07-26-2017 09:06 PM       View Profile for JamesMichael   Email JamesMichael   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for JamesMichael

Wonderful...james
LeeJ
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beautifully written and articulated
BluesSerenade
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True to form.

Your poetry touches deep in this heart of mine.
JerryPat2
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When you are reaching for that very "special" person you have called it like it is and what it feels like . . . "'cause love is like the sky and I'm diving from a great height." Excellent.

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Passionately written. It's a piece of work that can flow very nicely off the tongue, similar to lyrics that are sung.

This line is particularly powerful:
quote:
lovers in abstract dancing into the blue

I loved it. Enjoyed.
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